Reviews for The Chronicles of Zephyr: Rise of Evil
Athaliah Azazeal chapter 5 . 3/15/2005
thank you thank you thank you! if he hadnt have beaten down that man i'd have never reviewed this story ever again!
Athaliah Azazeal chapter 4 . 3/15/2005
What a twat, killing that man, and all he did was help out that girl that was getting beat up. I cant stand to see bad things happen to good people. Seeing as you have already wrote about thirty more chapters, i will try to get through them all today, but please, i hope that kicks the living shit out of this girls dad
Athaliah Azazeal chapter 3 . 3/15/2005
A dont kill him. PLus waht a fucker aiming at a little girl. How mean.

Athaliah Azazeal chapter 2 . 3/15/2005
Nice descriptions here, zephyr sounds hot, liking this a lot right now
Athaliah Azazeal chapter 1 . 3/15/2005
brilliant beginning. carry on writing!
Vee chapter 12 . 12/6/2004
this story is realy good, maybe you should do one that's completely action, and no mushy stuff...nah, you're good at that stuff...

Lucky chapter 1 . 12/2/2004
I thought it was pretty good. Liked the style of writing that you used for it and how well you described the characters. And, the storyline is unique, which made it much more enjoyable. But, try to be a little more descriptive in the battles, had a hard time keeping up with who was doing what. But other than that, I liked it.
Bwah the Grand chapter 11 . 12/1/2004
Hmm. I have things that I want to say, but they're getting all mixed up, and trying to come out at once.

*thinks for a minute*

I thought it was just ok, I'm not sure why though. Other people evidently like your writing *points to other reviews* but it was kinda middleish to me. I think the flow of the words and the writing was somewhat...mechanical. I think it would be better if you added more detail, and took out words that aren't needed. Adverbs too. Kill all teh adverbs! ROAR! O

But this isn't bad, just not spectacular.
HeckHouse chapter 11 . 11/30/2004
Great piece! Good battle scenes, very interesting to read. I enjoyed the dialoge as well. My only advice would be that sometimes it was a little unclear who was doing what in the battles.
boomper chapter 1 . 11/30/2004
Man, this story kicks a**. its got good characters, a good story line and good action scenes. its clever how you've distinguished these with italics. Only problem is that it isnt finished. keep up the good work
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