Reviews for The Tear of Zolfax
Allison Lucas chapter 5 . 1/26/2005
Hey big guy! Love it! You hadn't let me read more than chapter one before... But I love it very much! I hope you keep it up. Luv ya pack brother!
Scriptfox chapter 1 . 7/24/2004
A very good beginning. This other world is very interesting, I can't wait to learn more about it. There are some holes in describing things I think you could fill in, such as when you say :'Teishi got up and clawed the human's face. "I'm no kitten."
"This is how you repay me for saving your life?"'
did the knight have scratches on his face, or did he dodge the attack? And when Teishe turns and runs into the woods the transition of areas is a bit fast. Describe the landscape, how is Teishe feeling, and other such descriptive things. Othere than these several wholes, and there are just a few others, this is a great start to a good novel.
CascaOzy chapter 1 . 7/21/2004
It's schizo. He just seems to be everywhere. WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU!