Reviews for Confusion
Joey7691 chapter 1 . 10/31/2005
I really like this. The rhyming seems a bit off in places, the beat isn't consistant, but I like it just the same. The biggest problem line I saw was 'Because you're hidden behind selfishness and you just can't see'Maybe you could try 'You're hidden behind selfishness and you can't see' or even 'You're hidden behind yourself and you can't see.'I don't know. I love the feelings the poem gives off though.
Dani chapter 1 . 8/25/2004
omg raynut that poem is amazing, touching, and so well written u rock(my world hehe)!
mandy chapter 1 . 8/18/2004
aw tam! thats so good lol u so good at writin poems! lucky person ... lol :):)
Marika chapter 1 . 7/9/2004
woah dawg that was really deep