Reviews for Ordinary |
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![]() ![]() Rolls eyes. Bloody brilliant. In case you hadn't noticed, not everything is about appearances, which is what this fic is entirely made of. And it's rather corny. |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha yeah I know what you mean... it's weird when you have a "type" of guy you like and then someone comes along who is the opposite of every one of your favorite characteristics, but you adore him anyway. I feel like, although the beginning gives the piece its backround, it could be sharper... I love your descriptions of color but maybe you could play with the sentence structure a little to make it even more vivid.I like it, though... it nails the feeling and made me smile at the end |
![]() ![]() Really nice, quite beautiful. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ::Huggles:: This is one of the best shorts on fiction press that I've read. You did change tenses a bit in this, but over all it was wonderful. This is what I try to strive for when I write fiction, because really, who wants to read about perfect characters (Mary-Sues)? They get old really fast. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lovely. Wonderfully subversive... giving some of the rest of us hope! It's very well written, very poetic. Fantastic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh wow..aw...I really really liked this. Most of us are, unfortunately average, and I love how you made it this way: average, even boring looking people finding joy with another just like them. It's clever the way you wove this, describing them just so we wouldn't see them as beautiful in any way. This was wonderful, and the description was very well done. I loved it! Thanks for the reviews on my poems. Keep writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay. I'm really pathetic. It actually made me cry. How sad is that? Really nice job on the description and the idea. I really loved it. Obviously. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a superb story! the way you comapre their features is just amaizing, very creatieve! It was an extraoridnary piece! phenomenal! by the way, thanks for commenting on my sory "prison" and dont worry, it's staying a one shot. ) xoxxoxo |
![]() ![]() Wow. What a descriptive story. Good work. |
![]() ![]() I am in like with this!. it's wonderful! hehe, even though you made it seem as though their features were plain, you made them seem special at the same time, i.e. the dust in the watercolor and peroxide kind of yellow. i love that! |
![]() ![]() ![]() *cheers* |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh thank god - it's about time someone writes a story about normal people. Hehe... |