Reviews for Brooklyn Bridge March
Story-Teller's Aide chapter 1 . 7/14/2004
i really liked that poem. it all seemed to fit together really well, i couldn't really suggest any improvements. the poem as a whole was constructed brilliantly. It managed to get across the point in a clever way, without going into too much detail. it was very very good.
well done :)
P.H. Wise chapter 1 . 7/12/2004
Not bad. Your imagery is effective, but not as much as one would like. It's better in some places than others, though. I can see the march, but the images of "old men with egos" are not particularly strong ones. Surely there are more evocative ways of describing them than that.