Wow, very dark, but wonderful work, the main character though, she made the show, that sickly sweet child-like voice at the end puts a little bit of the gusto needed at the very end of a horror story

The Teller of Stories

this story is very dark... evil almost... but i liked it none the less... good job

Very well-written. I found the narrator to be a very interesting character, though through the story, she came out sounding rather younger than fourteen, especially at the end. Still, she really gives this story its feel. Great job!