Reviews for What's Important? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I like this format and the ending... and your title... thanks for your reviews |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really like the message you're portraying, it's true; what does really matter? materialism or life/love? your writing is really deep, pienso que es muy guay. |
![]() ![]() ![]() dreams and hope, matieral things dont mean everything. and i didnt mean to say bribery doesnt work, it does, but it just seems they might review for the wrong reason. interesting poem thing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() To start, thank you for your reviews. They're greatly appreciated. And to answer your question, no, sorry, it's not the same Alice in Wonderland. I wish I could help you with that. Anyways, I really, really like this. I like the points of view it expresses. It's deep in a way that's not hard to understand, if that makes any sense at all. But anyway, that was meant as a compliment. Keep writing! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very short, but very nice. I love the idea you put into this. Although, as a suggestion, maybe try not to use one or two word lines a lot. Sometimes it tends to be confusing. Other than that, the idea is one-of-a-kind, which I love. Great writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh cool, very interesting! such different lives, i like how you put these two people together, and i like the ending line, sent a shiver down my spine! (i didnt mean to rhyme) hahaha... ok... stop... right... yeah i like this a lot, great structure, kinda listing the two aspects of their lives, v good x weasel within x |
![]() ![]() ![]() : I wouldn't leave. I liked it though. Everyone tends to leave those who don't have what they have. LIFE. :( |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice, very short- I LOVED IT D you're an excellent writer keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() again another original poem from you, you really go outside the box and that's a way good thing...i bet you will be a famous authoress someday from the pace you're going at!-anime freakizoid X_X |
![]() ![]() ![]() "So much cheaper to look away" how true is that! This poem was quick but packed a punch (is that the right phrase?) I love the structure with the parallelism, too. Very nice, very nice. Thanks for reviewing my work as well :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() It is very sad to see homeless people. I'm hearbroken to know that so many people are homeless with no money or jobs or anyway of getting ahead. Very sad...but great poem! Good job! ~lilyoftheflames |
![]() ![]() You do use very well simple situations that everybody have experimented. In simple and daily things we realize what's really matters. Love is that thing that support all of us in one way or another. Best wishes, Helga. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This poem is so good too! Gah, I'm jealous (I'm also Sharon if you forgot)! I liked how you wrote this poem, all abrubt and non-rhyming. It matched the feeling perfectly. I also liked how I couldn't really tell what you were talking about until near the end. "So much cheaper to look away" - my favorite line, it says a lot with little words. . Sakiko |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, it me Eriko on my other name. Anyways, short but nice...it gave a nice feeling and also I liked the topic...it not like mine oh the tradegy and stuff...(yes I am definetly weird) I was going to answer this in mail...but I lost your email address -_-...send me something so I can get it again. Answer to your question I warn you know that most of my poems are some sort of violence towards a girl. Basically it because I love writing about that because I can put myself in that girls shoes and just write what I would feel. And plus i love writing that kind of tragedy, I have always been into tragic, and angst, what can I say. Also I write a lot of it after I watch or read something sad, like when I read about Oto and Megute...that made me write a lot of those poems, just the way Megute felt and gave up...it made me feel horrible. I hope that answers your question, a poem of mine under this name doesn't is a little different. please don't forget to email me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Moving to say the least! Well done! |