Reviews for The Destroyed Beauty
myno chapter 1 . 11/21/2004
Again, an excellent poem. You have a better understanding of this than many people.
Dwyer chapter 1 . 8/7/2004
Very good. I liked this one a lot.
DarkOpalDragon chapter 1 . 8/6/2004
This is quite good, but perhaps the punctuation is a little off. I'm not sure though because I'm really tired right now... Watch the commas and periods and that could help.
katmonkey chapter 1 . 7/26/2004
Awesome poem. I really like it.
SleepDontWeep chapter 1 . 7/23/2004
am gona cry d beauty is overwhelming! i have 2 go cry! so wonderfuly written! love ya xx
finch182 chapter 1 . 7/22/2004
I really like this. Keep writing your good at it.
AranelMirabella chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
I like it. It's really good, keep up the good work.
David Stephen chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
This is simply stunning. You have wrote about a simple thing, and turned it into an amazing and descriptive piece. It is amazing - it shows that people hide things - and we see them differently to how they actually are. I love this! Never stop writing!
Siende chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
Again, impressive writing. A well captured poem about the most deceiving thing there is: another person's beauty or happiness. Nice work!
W3DNESDAY chapter 1 . 7/14/2004
Wow, you have lots of talent and this poem was great.. but I like to give *real* criticism so..
The poem is great - really really good - before you get to the questions ("is what we see right?")
I think your poem could do better without the questions and more of the imagery that I saw in the beginning half of your poem (it was great btw lol)
what exactly can be seen in those hazel eyes of hers? describe the pain.. the thinly veiled facades.. whatever
You know, sometimes I kinda wear out my creative juices writing a great beginning and then I just kinda try to wind down my story so I don't have to write anymore (haha, lazy me).. anyway, this was a terrific poem and the only thing I can suggest is to revise the second part a little
great job!
ScenicRte chapter 1 . 7/14/2004
I must say this is amazing poetry, with so much feeling and depth. As a poet myself, I rarely come across such a marvelous peice. Keep up the good work.