|Reviews for Ashes in the Rain|
| pointythings chapter 1 . 7/17/2004
I think you could make the rhythm and lining of this a bit more consistent, and use more descriptive words. You've got a good idea here, but I think the emotions need to be more emphasized. Focussing on a vampire who is being washed away could be interesting, particularly if the vampire is meant to be the good guy.