Reviews for The Roof Of My Mouth
Ishtar Johnston chapter 1 . 7/18/2004
Are you perhaps recording this? I'd like to hear the finished product, let me know!
logical-unreason chapter 1 . 7/18/2004
The whole "just in" board is full with your work. How could I not review one lol.
I'd like to here this to music, the lyrics however on there own are still pretty sweet to read. It's a frantic self reflection on yourself. Full of self loathing and self pity and like all your work very "ego" focused (I). The violent imagery you squeeze into your poems kicks ass, you still have a lot of linguistical skill left over from your grunge days and you meld violent and bodily metaphors with more non physical emotional and spiritual things.
"There are others bleeding
There is too much pain
The sick and dying are competing
Fifteen minutes of fame"
Lovely mix that doesn't become beautiful nonsense it means something. As usual a very good piece, you just know no one else will review this because the first line doesn't have "cut my eyes open and drank the blood" in it.
Sorry for any spelling mistakes. I'm gay.