Reviews for Bounty on Ryan Niel
Relix chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
Not bad, not bad. It needs a bit more of action though, and there are a few grammar error here and there, but thats usual! And like DarkSorceress said, its quite confusing, but its the 1st chapter so I hope it gets better now. Ill be watching this one closely ).
DarkSorceress chapter 1 . 7/19/2004
Wait...did he end up repeating the dream in real life?
This chapter was good, but mind you, very confusing...I knew when the dream squence began, but I couldnt tell where it ended. Did it end right at the *?
Anyways, very interesting thus far; just watch out for spelling errors; the chapter was littered with them. And I also think that you should give us a little bit more character background on Niel.
Update soon...going on me favies!
DarkSorceress (I went back to Dark...Midnight wasn't working out)
P.S.- YSYF...have you given up upon Legends of Fate...if you have...;-(