|Reviews for The Black Gem|
| uinen lady of the seas chapter 6 . 11/15/2004
c'est tres mysterieux (how do you spell that, by the way?)
also, why are you letting jetta marry that evil scoundrel?
| Tempest Epilogue chapter 5 . 9/9/2004
Nice cliffhanger. An interesting chapter. Your HTML tags are all messed up, btw. Thought you might want to fix that. :)
~ Tempest Epilogue
| Tempest Epilogue chapter 4 . 8/9/2004
Very interesting. I particularly like the last line. And the whole thing with the road. I find it very easy to envision this town, and Jetta's surroundings, and everything else. Very good.
~ Tempest Epilogue
| Tempest Epilogue chapter 3 . 7/30/2004
I like this chapter. Very intersting. I like Fordon. In response to another reviewer: I like the use of 'twas and 'tis. Probably because I'm fond of saying those things myself, but I do think it works with the story.
~ Tempest Epilogue (formerly Hencellina
| Sea of Blue chapter 3 . 7/29/2004
Hehee, Fordon had better watch out, hadn't he? The silk handkerchief might be next...muwahahaha. Anyway. He seems rather mysterious too. One thing that I can't tell is how old he is...or how old Jetta is. Maybe you mentioned in chapter one. Probably in their teens, right? Anyways, interesting. Can't wait to read more!
| becca chapter 3 . 7/29/2004
memebili (yes, thats your new name): even though i know what happens, fordon is still cool
| becca chapter 2 . 7/25/2004
hi memibili...love the story, but as i know whats going to happen since you told me, PLEASE KEEP WRITING!
will there be more of the reverend? his loserness amuses me.
she who you worship entirely - becca
| Sea of Blue chapter 2 . 7/24/2004
This chapter was very good, I can't wait to read more! Although, the first half is exactly the same as the first chapter...did you do that on purpose? And is every new chapter going to include the previous chapter? That, I wouldn't do, because other readers might lose patience with reading the same thing over and over again. Just a thought! Great job, and I'm anxious to see what happens with this neighbor guy.
| Cthulhu chapter 1 . 7/24/2004
The story is great and it seems well told except for your preference for using 'twas 'tis and 'ye olde' syntax and mannerisms. It just seems cheesy and ruins an otherwise excellent story.
I understand why you are doing it but it really ruins the story.
| Tempest Epilogue chapter 2 . 7/24/2004
I like this chapter. And I am quite liking this story, I like the writing style and I like the characters. But was that an accident that you have the first chapter repeated here, or was it intentional? Anyhow, good story. :)
| Tempest Epilogue chapter 1 . 7/24/2004
I like the story. One thing though, that was confusing-it sounds like the wood the house was built from was the finest wood when she "spent my days strolling along the edge of the woods", which would be impossible for that to be 1520 if it was 1556 when she was writing this. But anyhow, that's all I think needs clarifying. :) It's a good beginning, and I'm on to read the next chapter.
| Annayt chapter 1 . 7/23/2004
This story IS really facinating. The way you describe and the words you use make the story setting seem very realistic. I can't wait to read the next chapter, hope it comes soon.
| Sea of Blue chapter 1 . 7/23/2004
Wow, this story is really really interesting. It kind of reminds me of this one story called..uumm...Witch Child or something like that. Set at ABOUT the same time, about a girl who was thought to be a witch. Really interesting...and at this point I don't know if she is or if she's just a little on the dark side. I'd love to read more! I would like to know more about what Jetta looks like though.