|Reviews for Seeing At Dusk|
| Amarantis chapter 13 . 1/17/2009
I guess this is a dead story, but I'd so love to read more. It's all so incredible and enticing. Please update.
| pangur chapter 13 . 7/15/2007
So, I just read all of that, and I really, really, really loved it. Your style was perfect, and I love the characters and the situations and the dialogue and everything. I noticed that you haven't updated this in two years though? That is definitely a very long time. But, I'm going to put this on my favorites, and hopefully you write another bit in time :)
| jlr chapter 13 . 6/11/2007
I don't really know if you are still updating this story, but if you aren't I think you should give it another look. You have done an excellent job of creating a complex story line, with characters to match.
Rosalie is completely lovable and the mistakes she makes stop her from being a wonder woman type ideal and not a person. I do have one issue with her character. When she is talking the pregnant woman down from messing up the apartment, she argues for a relationship, in a way. Also, she tries to set her friend up with Leila, because that is what her friend wants. Why is she so open to other people needing love and not Weston? I understand her holding herself apart from love (almost, although, considering the way she helps people with such optimism it is hard for me to believe that she does not believe in at least the potential for love to work out) but she blatantly does not understand why Weston would love her and that does not make sense to me.
Well, I don't really know if any of that is even important to you, since you might not even be writing this, but I really like the story and I thought you should know.
| Idiot Pilot chapter 1 . 1/7/2007
Ok before I even BEGIN reviewing this. YOU. SAW. CHUCK. PALAHNIUK. Wow. My face is that of pure envy right now. Now, for the review.
I like the line "His silhouette was traceable," and how she continues to talk about the love of his voice. For just the beginning, we are already experiencing plenty of character development. The guy is probably not supposed to be in her house (I mean it's at night, and he has a cap on, so he problem came from somewhere) and the girl is clearly head over heels about him.
Taking delight kills her? Curious... Even more curious is this Gavin character. I doubt with what her obsession over Weston that she is real big on Gavin, and apparently her mom doesn't like Weston. Gavin already sounds lame. Weston, represent. What is most curious of all is why Rosalie doesn't stop him. I assume this shall be revealed later on.
(It's late before finals, which is why I'm regurgitating everything you wrote)
I didn't know that people on suicide hotlines could forcefully stop people. A bit different from in Survivor where he tells them to kill themselves ;)
The next character that intrigues me is Esther. Crocodile slippers? That's awesome.
Towards the end I feel bad for Gavin, because he isn't good looking, but I still think he is weird. Her mourning over Weston only makes me wonder MORE why on earth she didn't stop him? Is it because she knew he couldn't "be fixed"? Or because he was set in leaving? Perhaps this shall be explained later on, but I can only read one chapter tonight.
| OoohLookACat chapter 13 . 10/11/2006
that's a good story.
i like the way it's going.
| cherrypiesizzle chapter 5 . 7/17/2006
Rosalie pisses me off. ;p Just had to mention that, not trying to offend. I'm sure you meant her to be that way, and that's what a good author does.
| cherrypiesizzle chapter 4 . 7/17/2006
...umm, I don't get why she's being so mean to him, when he so obviously cares about her. And why is she staying with Gavin when she likes Weston? And, er, Weston and Rosalie's conversation was sorta...you know, insane, crazy...it had the unstable quality anyway and I had a hard time following it. Not to say that your story isn't good, because it's brilliant, honestly it is, you have a beautiful writing style, but I don't think this story is for me, er, anymore anyway. I love it though, and please update soon for all your other readers! Please? They love this story a lot I can tell.
| cherrypiesizzle chapter 2 . 7/17/2006
Er...I'm quite confused so far, but then again I've only read two chapters. But still...
| cherrypiesizzle chapter 1 . 7/17/2006
I can see what you mean when you say that you feel closer to the characters of this story more than your others...because I feel it too. Wow. Love this, love this, LOVE THIS. Can't WAIT for you to take it off hiatus. (do it soon, please?)
| she's not breathing chapter 12 . 5/7/2006
this. is. absolutely. beautiful. i love how far you've strayed from the conventional. you've drawn out something intense & absorbing. every character can get skewered & it's like you spread them out on glass & click on different coloured lights to illuminate them - even a character like helen. it all - it shifts. *tilts head* ... & i (think i) see where this is heading, & that makes me sad. because i don't know - there's something beautiful about the breaking point, when you're up past the pinnacle & shattering, but then after, it's over. overover. in any case i'm rambling. but - exquisite writing. tangible. thoughihopetogodidon'tknowwhy. i could fall in love with this. you have a style that just - implodes. it's poetry threaded into prose, but it's a heavy-handed poetry, a secondhand from-the-corner-of-the-eye poetry. lovelove it. & your writing reminds me of sylvia plath. ugh. that's near iconic status for me. okaay. enough of my babbling. rosy is tragic. weston is fucking regret. i shall become impatient for updates. yesyes i shall.
| snow.fantazi chapter 13 . 4/16/2006
although the first few chapters were confusing i still like it. its gettin interesting and please update soon
| butinsideimwearingblack chapter 13 . 3/30/2006
I love this story. I come back to it, once in a while, just because I, well, like it.
"Weston went out.""Do you know why?""Probably to buy you a castle."
I like that, too.
I like the way you write. There's something kind of... both emotional and peaceful about it. Keep up the great work, and update? Please?
| she's not breathing chapter 1 . 3/27/2006
yeah. damn you. now because of what you said to zara (midnightowl) i have to read all YOUR work. too curious. & why you gotta write so much? *hiss* ... okay this could take me a while. i already love it. you have this style that's like double-edged. the words tell one story & the tone tells another. wow. this is cool. lovelove it. & i hope the crazy bits are GOOD (which i know they will be). weston mm. canijumphim...
| deedee chapter 13 . 3/1/2006
i just read this whole story in one go and i was so sad to see tht it was not finished ( but i just have to say this I LOVE IT! haha..really, so many ppl at fiction press write the same old cliched high school love stories where they fall in love with their brother's best friend or with their own best friend so its really a treasure to find stories like yours in here..so PLEASE update soon k..i love your 'could be paradise' too..
| Strike Me Dead chapter 13 . 2/15/2006
What is the status of this story? I've read it all and I would really like to see it finished; it's probably my most favorite story I've read on here.