So this is part of another story? Now I want to find that story as well. Either way, this was nicely executed; one can find the thought of long sentences draining, but since this work consisted of mostly descriptions, it's much better.

So, this is just one of...what, five works you have on this site? Oh, you are SO going to regret showigng me your profile. Great job.

-Pointy_O

This poem stands pretty well on its own without a story surrounding it, actually.

Intresting story. I liked the cowboy. Keep up the good work.
Juliet.