n.n I really like your writing style, your rhymes flow with out seeming forced or straying from the idea. Just one thing ; I think you meant "seems" and not "seams" for the last word. "Seams" is like.. the line where two peices of cloth are sewn together, lol, great poem though.

erm, it's okay. The last word is spelled wrong. It's seems. It doesn't really do anything for me, but maybe that's just because your heart isn't in it. I dunno. R&R my stuff if you're bored.