Reviews for Jaded
Cheyenne Kai chapter 1 . 1/18/2005
I love it! beautiful imagery
Elbereth141 chapter 1 . 8/19/2004
Only work for pay, eh? I woulda r/r anyway, i always review my reviewers.
This is really good, if a little confusing as to the ryming sceme. But then, mine are really fixed so im not one to comment on that.
Your wording is great, good use of adjectives; you could be more free with the ryming, though what you've used works for this well. Im starting to sound like my english teacher... . not good!
~Elbereth141~
happy thing chapter 1 . 8/18/2004
I really like this poem. There are many good things about it. Everything has a very mystical feel, and I like that. One suggestiong I might make is that you settle on a rhyme scheme. If you're going to rhyme it should probably be uniform. It's a great piece though.
Simon Erif chapter 1 . 8/18/2004
Very vivid poem. I really like the way that you tell a tale with it. The tale is very emotional but still distant enough that it won't make you feel suffocated. I like that in a poem. If it's too emotional then you can't really read it well. Very lovely tale you spun from the words. Lovely. Keep it up.
TwyliteRose chapter 1 . 8/18/2004
please review this! thanx:) (yes i reviewed my own stuff! there's nothing wrong w/that!)