|Reviews for A life on the Line|
| Remy Lourenco chapter 1 . 1/19/2005
| Optanic chapter 1 . 1/5/2005
Your story is fantastic.
I couldn't help thinking I'ld rather read a happier plot especially since you're so young.
But treating the story as if an adult wrote it, I'ld want another character to fall for because bad guys get to end up bad so much more than bad gals don't have to change it for me though!
You're years ahead of me in the writing of dasturdly deeds.
Good luck and Happy New Year!
| Cellar Door Mongrel chapter 1 . 8/18/2004
I really like the idea for this story, but I noticed a few spelling and grammatical errors. The plot is great, but I suggest that someone, possibly myself, edit it a little. the editor, in writing terms, is called a beta. you are the alpha, the writer. Would you like a little help with it?
Other than that, great work.