|Reviews for Love And War|
| fazzingaway chapter 1 . 8/21/2004
not bad for the first chapter; i can see you're setting up for the rest of your story. you started out very well in the beginning. your pace was good and there were nice humor moments but i felt that as the chapter progressed you started to rush through the content and were lacking in relevent details like jessica's or tristan's feelings or the settings and the mood and so on.
language-wise i was quite pleased though. it was a very smooth read; no annoying grammar mistakes and all that. also, your characters developed quite well and there were some very nice descriptive paragraphs on them.
i'm looking forward to the next chapter :)