The story is powerful, I like how it was presented. Good job writer! If you have some great stories like this one, you can publish it on NôvelStar, just submit your story to hardy nô or joye nô

Hey, i like this story. It moves a bit fast but other than that it's well written.

AmyBabe

hm...ok then, interesting. cya later ~ Alenor.

i think this was a really cute story!

WOW! I liked it!

Cute story. :)

~ Bai.

Hi~

First, this story has an interesting plot to it. I like how you introduced the characters by the photograph. However, there's a few things I have a problem with. First, you set it in Arizona but it did not become a state until 1912 so in 1865 and 1875 it would have been a territory (they petitioned for that in 1854 if you are interested). I felt like you did not make that point , there were a few grammer and spelling mistakes that you might want to look for. Third, dynamite was not invented until 1866 so I am not sure how widly used it was only 9 years later. Fourth, you neglected to mention at all the Civil war that would have been taking place at the start of the story which would have had some effects on the people. That leads me to the fifth point, which is this story would be better if it was fleshed out more. Adding more personality to the characters would make it a more enjoyable read. It is only nine chapters long but with some addition it could be even better. Tell the stories the two lovers shared, talk more about their hopes, dreams...

Anyway, just some suggestions. I hope you do not get offended. Best of luck to you with future endevors.

Chapters a little short but overall I liked it.

yah, it deserves a sequel. dk, but try more descriptions or something. it goes at a bit of a fast pace.

fun, i;ve never read a western b4, but i plan on going through as many as i can tonight, if any of them are like yours.

I like it so far and Im aiming to read more of it, I like the thought of how shes got a bigger bounty on her head! :P

please don't give up on this story

i just finished reading and i thought it was great! Loved the ending and i cant wait to read the sequel! Hope you post soon (if not already) Anyway... loved the charaters and the plot even though it was short! Maybe you could do a romance with each of the brothers... That would be cute! OK so just wanted to tell you that im looking forward the the next story!

Queen of Laughs

This is a really good story...

very gd!