|Reviews for Shalem|
| in theory chapter 1 . 1/30/2006
I saw this on the "Quick Picks" bit and thought...oh I'm sure I know that laydee. So yeah, I opened it. (and incidentally, the title is so much like one mf my favourite byebye's...shalom.) There's been a bit of argument between me and some random person I know who speaks Jewish. Shalom, I was told, meant peace..? He said it means Kingdom. He almost convinced me, I'm confused now so I just say peace :P
*besides the rambling*
This is a tiny, oh so adorable love poem to me. Unshaven faces are so raw, it's like masculinity (something about that word keeps leaping into my thoughts, I tried to write and I couldn't get it out of my head. I think it's in one of your more recent ones! darn ya.) and it's primal. Like the vision of women with huge chests, and flat stomachs and smooth jaws, strong men typically had rough cheeks. I dunno, you got me interested in this now. I had a goatee until recently (I'm dying my hair burgundy-red on Fri, it's tinyshort now too but it was really long)...I looked stronger with, or something.
I think any sense has kinda left my fingers. But still, the image of an unkept guy is something I can identify with.
Shalom, or peace, whichever.
(hope things are going good, I'd email but hotmail is jammed tonight).
| Lancealot chapter 1 . 9/10/2004
WOW... it leaves a powerful image in your mind! Very nice job done here on your poem! Thanks for the review!
| ylem chapter 1 . 9/6/2004
Beautiful & poetic...
| FELICIA-SPENCER chapter 1 . 9/6/2004
Tis is a short one. One filled with imagery, and emotion. This is really good. keep up the great work.
| SleepDontWeep chapter 1 . 8/26/2004
WOW O WOW O WOW O WOW O WOW!
this is so short yet so wow! i admire u greatly!
love ya lots!
please if u can review my story:thats not how it happened.
it wud mean alot! x
| CrazyChik chapter 1 . 8/26/2004
short and sweet and very enchanting! You are really good...
| Raya Dronaile chapter 1 . 8/26/2004
Short and beautiful! good work
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/25/2004
I liek it.. very nice descriptions
| graffiti-skies chapter 1 . 8/25/2004
wow this was beautiful
| ashe hikari chapter 1 . 8/25/2004
beautiful, powerful. like other reviews, i like the ivy metaphor used.
| i-kill-4-fun chapter 1 . 8/24/2004
this is magical. so magical
| Medevia chapter 1 . 8/24/2004
Wow... 15 words and still so powerful. It's breath-taking and beautiful.
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 8/24/2004
Absolutely perfectly lyrical. Every word fits and adds to the subtleness of the mood. Well done. -m-
| sweetcicily chapter 1 . 8/23/2004
I love that you conveyed such emotion in a very short piece. Way for the interesting ivy metaphor!
| bach-player chapter 1 . 8/23/2004
extrordinary short piece! loved it!