|Reviews for Eating the Rifle|
| Eyes Unclouded chapter 1 . 8/29/2004
Wow, I really liked this. Short but original. Very interesting how the story took off from the opening line. Just a note: you may want to move the dialogue so that it's clear who's speaking. For example, when David goes to the door and someone asks where David is going, I got confused and thought David was the mailman. It might be good to specify that Mary was saying that. Also, because it was the only misspelling I saw, "deceased" is misspelled near the end as "decreased".
Overall, awesome story. Love how the narrator is so straightforward about the whole situation. Very curious about how it turned out that he was pointing a rifle out the window in the first place. Good work! Keep writing!
| Sugar Jones chapter 1 . 8/29/2004
Interesting start. Do you intend on continuing it, or is this something for the pile? lol. Exercises like that always turn out crazy for me, nice one tho.