|Reviews for duplex|
| the naked civil servant chapter 1 . 10/18/2006
my god :
you have to make this into a song. it's so perfect. the BEATS, man, the RHYTHM :P. absolutely gorgeous. so abstact & yet so... amazingly empathic & EVOCATIVE
| Another Pseudonym chapter 1 . 10/14/2004
oh yay, nonsense!
adolescent poetry at its finest: the words make no sense, but it all has some vaguely decipherable meaning to it.
| breakdown in the waiting room chapter 1 . 10/7/2004
This is one of my favourite poems on this site, quite possibly of all time. The subtle assonance, and especially the first stanza and last three lines- are pure genius. I love your work because you have to work to find the mean; your writing really commands attention.
| SiliconeInflatedHeart chapter 1 . 9/4/2004
you did rhymey wordies too! good job!
| ylem chapter 1 . 9/1/2004
Oh. Fuck. *breathes* I think I love you. Truly. To some your play on words might just sound like a bunch of syllables jumbled together, but it really makes the sound of the poem. The whole theme was like a coming of age - /well i was on my bike sugar high the very first time/ like you're riding a tricycle, just moving through life, getting stoned, living, & yet you're so instrospective & immature. Like a television out of focus. So strange...
| this is britt chapter 1 . 9/1/2004
Reminded me of "A Wolf At The Door" by Radiohead (great song). The urgency, the continuous pounding of it- well it was all very great, and it reaffirmed your stature completely as one of the best writers here in my head again and again.
| la nuit mes yeux t'eclairent chapter 1 . 9/1/2004
ah, so i love the funky flow of this. the only constructive criticism i have is this: i see you were going for the similar end sound with "skippy walky to the rocky picky up..." that's really interesting, but i think "skip walk to the rock pick up..." works well enough on its own. it still has that element of rhyme/assonance and sounds a bit more sophisticated. other than that i thought this was absolutely amazing.