Just read all ur chapters, i can't believe this! is she going to have the baby or an aborition? hurry and write another chapter ok?

you ever gunna write more for this one? lol

Sorry for not reviewing this sooner. Many sorries. Okay on with the actual review...This is written so well oman, I could've cried at the end. How sad, how depressing.I do hope that this isn't the end and that it gets happier and I HATE AIDAN! He's a loser face! Boo! Anyways, yay this story rocks!

It's definately changed tack. Overall it seems to lack detail, and it can be confusing when time changes. Try using *'s in between time changes. It amused me she started off saying she wanted to be slut and then, "I'm glad she doesn't know how awful her big sister is, what a dirty slut she has become." Ironic really.

Interesting but I think the swimming pool metaphor was slightly overdone.

Almost disjointed, strange but appealing somehow. Shallow though.

It srated almost childishly, I thought she was quite young, but as it went on she does sound older. You seem to have written her character like she tries to hard to be 'slutty.' But it's.. interesting if not a little odd.

No offense, but I really didn't like it that much. I thought it was just a little weird, but that's my opinion & I hope that this doesn't stop you from writing. I know it won't. Sorry about the lame reveiw, but i'm just getting the hang of it.

wow...i love it so far. there is more rite? its so sad her mom had to die. aidan turned out to be such a jerk! guess most popular guys r like tht tho...sick i tell u. love where this is going, nice concept of the diary n all. good work!

I haven't read that much, but it sounds good. I'll read more when I get home. Great job. I hope you r&r my 2nd chapter of "The Choose" later. I'll review when i'm done.

really well written, you got across the emotions really well. I'd definately like to more of this. keep writing, your stuff is deadly.

really well written, you got across the emotions really well. I'd definately like to more of this. keep writing, your stuff is deadly.

I had to review on chapter 6 since i cant reveiw on the same thing twice! now, i see that you have not updated this story which i hope u soon do!
I was looking thro ur pf DONNIE DARKO ROCKS!
I find it kinda funny
i find it kinda sad
the dreams in which im dying r the best i ever had

hehe
smurfs are asexual they dont have reproductive organs under those little white pants

that was really really well written.
it was so sad (i was trying to come up with a more intellectual word but failed) although my life is not like that i felt like i could relate to how she was feeling.i loved it...but i wish you would keep it going, i want to know what happens. well done.
cya
ps feel free to check out my story too! thanks
ciao

wow this goes really really deep, luv how u expressed her emotions, expesially after she found out that she was pregnant
u could hav gone deeper into her feelings after she had sex, maybe her bodily and phsyicall pains
good job on this!