Reviews for Injury
shea's surrender chapter 1 . 9/11/2004
how old are you? cause you speak like you're fifty and have seen it all, felt all the pain in the world. It comes across well, but when name a poem "Injury" and describe it as another attempt to get inside your head, it's kinda worrisome.
AntiPleasure chapter 1 . 9/6/2004
I like the repitition, I think this would make a really good song actually. My advice to you David, play around with different styles and such I think you've mastered that anyway and use a bit of imagery to back up your feelings and make it more effective for the poem. There, that's my poet-critic coming out of me. Hehehe! P
Jenna xoxo
MySweetPrince chapter 1 . 9/2/2004
Hey beautifully written. I really enjoyed reading it. keep it up
Aredhel Carnesir chapter 1 . 9/2/2004
Wow. That was well done! Everything seemed to flow so well. Did you mean it to be a song? Because it seemed to be one to me. Please r/r!