Reviews for Farewell
Aaron chapter 1 . 8/17/2014
So I just stumbled upon your poetry - I'm a Colorado person myself. Used to live in Johnstown, which is about 15 min. away from Greeley. I think your poetry is beautiful but needs a little refinement and editing

I'm being torn to pieces
Feeling everything falling apart
Knowing my heart and soul are bleeding
Burning tears stinging my eyes
My mind screaming in a rage

"I'm being torn to pieces
everything is falling apart
my heart and soul are bleeding
while burning tears sting my eyes
my mind screams in rage"

the idea of these small edits is to keep the tenses coherent throughout the poem and to allow the smooth transition from line to line. I think you have wonderful heart and brillant mind from what I've read of your profile and some of your poetry... You should def. keep writing - I publish all my poetry on a website called All poetry - here's the link to my page: ademon if you decide you're interested in reading some amateur poetry there it is for your taking. Thanks again for sharing your wonderful work on here!

Aaron
Trinity Joselyn Carter chapter 1 . 9/5/2004
awh... i hate people who use other people.. it's just wrong