Reviews for The Mistake |
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![]() ![]() ![]() um theres nothing here but on hold? |
![]() ![]() ![]() NO! I was so looking forward to the next chapter. (cries) update soon please |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, i hope your computer is fixed and that you will update soon. Its really good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() you seem fond of the name gabriel...sounds good so far was sniffing her butt part of getting into her good books? few typos but not noticable really.. |
![]() ![]() You have interesting ideas. However I read blood and chocolate years ago and loved it. It seem s as if you are useing large chunks of it when I am sure you can easily stand on your own two paws. Do me a favour try palying a bit of Werewolf the Apocolypse, or WOD Werewolf when it comes out. Create your own ideas. You are good I see great potential, if you want advice drop me a line I know enough about werewolves and shapeshifters to be one. Keep up the great work I look forward to seeing future writing from you. |
![]() ![]() this is awesome, i really look forward to future chapters please update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this one too! I loved Blood and Chocolate! Can't wait for more! ~adders~ |
![]() ![]() MROW! I love this story to! *glomp* hehehehe |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter, you may want to watch you spelling mistakes though. Like the word quart instead of court. Also slow things down. Describe the transformation in more detail give the readers a visual of what is going on. it will help your story greatly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This sounds a lot like Blood and Chocolate by Anette Curtis klaus. have you ever read that? its a good book. The basis for this story is good but you may want to slow things down and give more explanations for things. |