This is so deep. I love the bit at the end which turns the questions on the reader.

I like how it's all nicely summarized at the end, just to tie up all of the loose ends. The refrain is effective too, as it keeps reiterating the 'who is she?' idea right the way through, without being too frequent.

Your rhymes were spot on right the way through, and the metre was more-or-less flawless, although it did sound a bit like a rap, which I didn't think suited the poem very much (but then I'm just really prejudiced against rap music)

I can empathise with this poem because I had a 'perfect' teacher once (exactly like your character in the poem, funnily enough), and it always niggled me how she didn't seem to have any flaws. I saw the mask crack eventually, though. You could add a revelation like that as another verse or two - then it would conclude like a story, if you wanted.

Wow..harsh, but gentle. Reveals the many sides of people and situations. I love it. My only problem is that some of the rhyming just doesn't feel right.

this is really great ! Its one of my favorite things Ive read ever. This should be a song someday , evenescance should look out . lol. your fa real talented .

-thinking- who is she? (italicize and underline 'is')'tis very good and unique.:)

I gotta say, this was one of the best pieces I have ever read. So powerful, dark and depressing all at the same time. Totally Fantastic!

interesting, and i agree, you ofen can't tell who people really are. It's a pretty good poem, but the rhyming seems unnecesary and makes it sound rather forced and awkward. Ever tried real free verse, based purely on rythm, no structure or rhyme? You might like it.

Wow, I love this poem, truly! The rhythm is wonderful. I like the thoughts and ideas behind the words. A poem that actually invokes thought-how nice for a change! . Great job.

Hmm well. The beginings a bit...hm.
'No one ever realized how much that hurt inside
That every time they told her this, was one more night she cried.'
I like this bit though.
I think the ends better than the end. The end is brill. I'm guessing you have a tune for this.

Wow. . . umm. . . wow. Powerful. I think I'll add that to my favorites.