GREAT work! everything goes together; i love the end too!

ooh! i like it...but what did 'you' do? or...erg...anything?still good though -winks-

beautiful...I love the intent of your poem and title.

very nice, you were right, i do like it. The rhyme scheme is odd, but i like it that way. I'm a huge fan of oddness. :P

sad ending,... I love the format

lol...what rhyme style? no it's a really good poem. rhyming isn't always important, u know? well u do it beautifully in your other poems though- but i love the poetic devices you used and i like the rhythm too. great job! it brings out your feeling...
Aaron

I like interesting lines such as "Drown in my own air" and "Sinking in the light." They give the poem character. Towards the end the thoughts in the second to last stanza don't seem to connect very well, or have a difficult transition. I think it would be better if you took out the last three lines altogether. Overall this is a good poem. Nice work.

Wow. Cool. You may have noticed that it was a good idea to review my work because it means i take a look at yours. Scratch my back, i'll scratch yours.
You like writing scary stuff don't you.

i love this
you're an excellent writer

::goosebumbs::. This is a genuinely good piece of work.