Reviews for The Serengetti
Lisseyelen aka Lady V chapter 1 . 9/27/2004
Yay! I like this one too. "Cracked white bones/Juicy red mean surrounded by vultures."
And the zebra description.
I suppose if I were to change it it would be to take out the safari vehicle part, but I suppose that's sort of the point, though. I just don't like mixing "human" and "nature," for the most part. But the effect is cool, because it's sort of a total surprise.
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 9/11/2004
Dear Starpoet—feels like a sketch that you want to finish. Here's some comments—pls accept in the gentle fashion they're proferred. m

Vast numbers cover land—
Wildebeest bleat and bleed
Juicy red meat—lion's meal.
Cracked white bones,
Vultures feast,
Lies alongside.
Black blends to white.
White melts to black.
Zebras streak past—
Giraffes run slow motion
Long necks extended,
Padded feet slap ground.
Lion stretches,
Yawns,
Poses— photographs,
Safari moves along . . .