hi i think that this story was not as good as the other ones U wrote. I don't wana see this again young lady! JK Y havn't I heard from U a lot

I'm so sorry! I've been meaning to read this for a long time, i just haven't had the chance. hope your not mad...
Um, this is kinda cool so far, but i'm a little short on time so i can't read the other two chapters yet, sorry!
Ps, read your bio, you like manga?
Later,
~Ffuffy~

i like it.
the rotten cheese part and the description of the piano especially caught my attention.
the twist in the plot was amazing!
you made it fit into the story very well and, having read And then there were none, i must say, the way you tied the ending to the title of the book (you know, how there's two diff titles to the same book. one's a play in three acts and the other is just a plain novel) was brilliant!

You write well and I love some of the imagery. It held my attention. Just be sure all your details are in line and that everything fits. For example, in chapter 2 the butler, I'm guessing, puts cotton in his ears but then turns the music off. When the red-haired girls asks who the woman is, he tells her. How did he hear the question if cotton was in his ears? And Shelly never told him who she was. Also, when she called for the cab, she falls into a deep slumber afterwards. It might not hurt to say she got into the cab, closed her eyes, and then fell into a deep slumber. The mansion description was confusing too. She was knocking on the gate, the gates opened on their own, and then this guy appears. You described the guy really well. But electronic gates, again I'm guessing, don't fit with the way you describe the mansion.
Hope this helps.