Reviews for Everlasting Mortality
La Editor chapter 9 . 12/21/2004
I love it... at first, when I looked through it, I thought that I would be disinterested.. so many chapters!however, i fell in love with this... i don't believe this is finished, with the ending of this chapter, but is it? BTW, thanks for telling me how my story has mistakes i'll start proofreading it. cha!Wishes
DarkSorceress chapter 8 . 9/19/2004
Excellent ending. Sorry I didnt review the last chapters, I really could not put a review together until this was complete. I was honestly expecting the guy to kill himself or something...
Atleast Nilesta defeated the evil...well, i dont like such a definition of evil, but I wanted Nilesta to winn anyways...
DarkSorceress
Saharian chapter 6 . 9/16/2004
This is not the happiest story. I mean I guess you kind of warned us about that in the summary. But still. It has a type of sadness that is not really easy to see if you know what I mean. Like I can feel the pain behind the words. Awesome writing. :-)
Saharian
Saharian chapter 5 . 9/15/2004
Wow when I said update soon you did _ It didn't know you were going to update THAT quickly. Well SORT OF because you do seem to update rather quickly most of the time but still. Srry I just can't get over it. Maybe I should just shut up about how fast you update... anyway I liked the story. The character is so interesting and I love her thoughts about everything that has happened to her. :-)
Saharian
Saharian chapter 4 . 9/14/2004
Ohh that's so sad. :-( She never saw her family again. I would die of heartbreak if I one day just left and never saw my family again. We are pretty close though. The story is moving at a really tight pace, which is good. No beating around the bush so to speak. I was wondering how long you were planning to make it? :-) Update soon,
Saharian
DarkSorceress chapter 4 . 9/14/2004
Another excellent chapter...I really can't wait for more...I like her character...
Update Soon!
DarkSorceress
DarkSorceress chapter 3 . 9/14/2004
You have alot of ideas that I have for my stories in this chapter...I hope you dont mind seeing them agan...I didnt copy, just we seem to have alot of the same idea...no wonder I like your storys so much...
Wow...I must say that I prefer your first person narration to your thirs person...not that your third person is bad, just that you have a particular knack for first person...
I am really REALLY liking this piece...feels like one of your best so far...I really want to read more!
DarkSorceress
Saharian chapter 3 . 9/14/2004
I maintain that you have way too much time on you hands to be typing up a chapter a day. Either that or you just type too fast. :-P Lol no jk. But still the ammount of times you update a week is insane. If only I could do that... but I can't so I'll shut up. I love the title of this chapter. It's so contradictory and it sounds so cool to say outloud. Not that that really matters... Anyway I am still not totally sure where this is going but I like it anyway. The last line is a bit creepy. It's getting interesting so update soon _
Saharian
violet chapter 2 . 9/12/2004
really good so far, keep writing! I must see what happens next! -
Saharian chapter 2 . 9/12/2004
Oo nice and long. I like it. I still really want to know more, which is a good thing, but you gave us just enough to quench our curiousity and yet not enough to stop it entirely. Evil. :-P
Saharian
FallenOfTheAngels chapter 1 . 9/12/2004
this is a really good begining, it not confussing at all...well to me that is. when you mentioned lights and snow did you mean a version of the northern lights in the desert? update soon :)
DarkSorceress chapter 1 . 9/11/2004
Nilesta is a smart girl; she’ll find shelter just as easily as we did. For now, we have to wait out the storm." ...you forgot a "
Oh great, there goes my suicide letter idea...maybe i should read further before I pass judgement...
So this isnt a standalone...
Looking really good so far, I want to read more...
Oh yes, about your last piece...you kinda did rush the ending, I forgot to mention that...
Anyways, update soon
DarkSorceress
Saharian chapter 1 . 9/11/2004
Hmm very interesting. I like how in a lot of your stories you go straight into something, without explaining to too much beforehand. It really pulls the reader into the story, and makes them read on, hoping to find out more about the characters you put in these interesting situations. The letter was an interesting touch and I like how it was in regular font whilst the rest was in italics. A bit of a change for once. :-) Update soon,
Saharian