|Reviews for Blood On Our Sneakers|
| McQuinn chapter 7 . 6/16/2010
It is such a shame you aren't continuing this.
Dude. Popsicle Stick. Why aren't you continuing this? I think I've read it over and over again-about...eleventy billion times. The voice is phenomenal. The characters sound like they're real. And your mastery of the English language puts 99% of the stories on FP to shame. What is WRONG with you? Continue this, or I'll break your face.
Lots of love.
| Mai-lee T chapter 7 . 6/15/2010
Yeah, I'm pretty much oblivious to any hints of any form, so my apologies for that .
But, I can't wait till the next update!
| Mai-lee T chapter 3 . 6/6/2010
Maybe Smith Smith could come across Jacklyn and the sleazy guy in the hallway and then bring her with him to his lunch table?
| Mai-lee T chapter 2 . 6/6/2010
I think you did a good job portraying Jacklyn having a nice side, but also still being tough. But, Smith was a little too weak for me...
| Mai-lee T chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
I just found this story from the SKoW website, and I like Jacklyn's spunk :] can't wait to read more!
| Measuremylifeincoffeespoons chapter 2 . 4/19/2010
Your humor is key here, and it's definitely on point. It gives the narrative a less serious tone that works well with the plot, so keep it up. I must say, it'll be interesting to explore a main character like Jacklyn. In real life, she's the type of broad I'd probably roll my eyes out, but you write her well enough that she's intriguing and even likable. Smithie was also loads of fun, so I look forward to seeing more of him. Sorry for the obnoxiously long review, just one more tidbit and I'll vanish! Your sentences tend to get a bit wordy. I love your writing style, but the wordiness tends to be a distraction, so I would recommend abstaining from putting too many thoughts into one sentence.
| Measuremylifeincoffeespoons chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
So I just stumbled upon this story for the first time (the title pretty much drew me in) and I must say that you really started it off with a BANG! That sounds pretty corny, but it's true. The main character is definitely a tough ass (at least, she thinks she's one) and comes off with a very clear impression. She's comes off a bit too strong at times for my liking, but I find a likable candidness to her character. Consider me a fan of your writing style, and that alone is enough to keep me reading. Congrats on your nomination and win, it was well deserved. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.
| Has A WaywithWords chapter 7 . 3/13/2010
Okay , so I saw this story on sKoW , and the title grabbed my attention . I loved the story . Normally I don't enjoy bitchy main characters , but Jacklyn grabbed my attention like a shooting star . . . or something along those lines . She's erratic , rebellious , just plain genius . I want to learn more about Spiro , Manhattan , Thatcher , and everyone else . Especially Smith , he intrigues me . Update soon .
| cherrypiesizzle chapter 1 . 2/8/2010
Nice, nice. I like this. The title was what first drew me.
| Danielle Gin chapter 2 . 1/31/2010
At first I thought this questionable, at best. After all, another girl in an all boys boarding school with every one of them falling head over heels for her has been done before, hasn’t it? Oh man, had I judged too quickly though! This is absolutely hilarious! From Jacklyn’s narrations with impressive and quirky vocabulary to her jaw dropping comments, her entire character is entertaining and probably enough to keep the story going plot wise. It’s obvious, though, that with supporting characters like Smith Smith (and Agent Smith, brilliant names!) that you’ve got an all star cast. Also, the boys reactions to Jacklyn are top notch. I can clearly envision a classroom of boys trying to act cool to impress, but scared witless by her. Great work! This totally deserves SKoW recognition!
| morexforxme chapter 5 . 1/25/2010
haven't read the chapter yet, but I want to say that your music taste rocks. the decemberists are my favorite band ever!
| Hellcat81 chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
this is gonna be funny. :D
| second-hand-screamo chapter 7 . 5/13/2009
You have no idea how much I loved this. I don't go for the melodrama in reviews that much, but this chapter almost made me cry. I went through a relationship with a boy that sang in a voice like that very recently, and remembering watching him sing about me onstage (after the breakup), well... yeah, Jackie-girl and I reacted very similarly. You take these intense, powerful characters and make them so realistic, so human. It's awesome and keeps getting better. It DID take a while to get this up dear, so I'm gunna have to go back and re-read after the next update and inform you of my guesses, but I will try to tell you my ideas, since you asked for it. I can't claim they'll be anywhere close, tho.
PS- I wanna go drinking with Holden. Make him real, please?
| under the bed chapter 7 . 3/6/2009
I was waiting for the funnies... And they didn't come. Your writing style somehow seems different in this chapter, like you just decided to use a more eloquent vocabulary, for no apparent reason. I don't know, maybe I'm just annoyed at the lack of funnies. Make her drunk again. Please? ]
| l'heautontimoroumenos chapter 6 . 10/17/2008
I really love this story up to now. You should update soon, as in very soon and I'd be extremelly happy. Wouldn't that make you happy and very joyful to make some crazy french girl living in bangkok happy? It's a one-in-a-lifetime thing, really.