Reviews for Bethrothed
Gothic-Cutie chapter 3 . 1/8/2005
What GOES unSEEn chapter 12 . 12/30/2004
i like the plot and the characters but you make a lot of grammar mistakes as well as spelling mistakes. Plus in the last chapter you said the horse perked up its ears and wagged its tail, horses don't wag thier tails. But great story
UNwitty182 chapter 13 . 12/22/2004
cool story...
ijustliketoreadurstories chapter 20 . 11/14/2004
omg this story is so good. i absolutley loved it... too bad you finished it... ever think of writeing a sequel about there like son or daughter growing up?
Torrential Chaos chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
I can't help last review put you at 99...and I had to make it 100! _ besides! I never got to tell you how much I loved Roman! Buaha...seriously tho...could there possibly be more chapters? *big puppy dog eyes* pweze? Squee...
Torrential Chaos chapter 20 . 11/14/2004
aww...I loved it! So cute...I had to read your other story to get my mind off the first one since it ended..._ you are a very good story teller!
Lady of romance world88 chapter 20 . 10/29/2004
Wow!Darius and Alexandra got married. I wonder what their honeymoon should be? I gladly Darius left Jenna for Alexandra. Hurry update soon.
lozza chapter 14 . 10/23/2004
Sorry to be picky, but in Chapter 14 when Darius takes Alexandra's virginity, there's something wrong.
It says that Darius "broke her barrier". However, extensive horse riding breaks women's hymens, and in Alexandra's case, hers may have been broken when she was very young.
So she didn't have a barrier then ...
Otherwise, very good!
RKRBirdgirl chapter 20 . 10/21/2004
dancing.stars chapter 20 . 10/20/2004
Yay! I am so happy that they married! Well, about Jenna... I wouldn't have been that forgiving if I were Alexandra. Great story!
yellow-eyed-pirate chapter 20 . 10/20/2004
That was such a good ending! I never thought in the beginning that that would even happen by the have Alexandra always acted towards him. Are you going to put more up?
Shannon chapter 20 . 10/20/2004
YAY! THEY GOT MARRIED! WOO! YAY! ok well i hope you update this or ill be sad lol...I love this bc alexandra changed in this whole thing to being mean to being lovey dovey haha! well update rule...the other chapter, by the way, was awsome...
Desert Illusion chapter 20 . 10/20/2004
Aw! That was sweet! FINALLY they get married! lol! Happy ending!...right?
Sweetie Pie chapter 20 . 10/20/2004
Good story -really liked it.
However, as things stand, it is a pretty 'wooden' read.
Your grammar, sentence structures, syntax etc need some more work.
Expect to see further submissions since you have the potential to get better and better if you intend to be a professional writer.
HisBeLovedChildofGrace chapter 20 . 10/19/2004
Please tell me there is one more chapter! Oh I'm Forgotten Child Of Christ but I changed my name...a little! Please tell me there is going to be ONE more chapter! Please!
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