|Reviews for Flight Descent|
| pointythings chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
Woah! This is very powerful. I love the choppy lining, and, for once, I'm all for the random rhyme in the middle. It's awesome. This has a wonderful loose rhythm to it, not rigid and not always followed, but sort of hovering behind the emotion of the words. It pulses and sways like a song. There's a mystery to it, and I like that. It's weird; you're taking all the things I normally hate and turning them into beauty. This is really quite impressive.
OK, now for the obligatory negative comment (though, really, this doesn't bother me all that much): I don't like your use of the phrase 'leave me hanging.' It smacks too much of slang, and doesn't fit with the tone of the poem.
Really though, this is wonderful. I think it's the best one of yours that I've in writing,pointythings