Reviews for Absence of Color |
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![]() ![]() ![]() it would be a lot more effective, i think, if the lines were longeri.e.- I dont' remember the last time my parents saidI love you." just to make the important lines stand out and more noticeable. i personally think you should leave your mother and friends out of this, it's kind of distracting from the emotions i'm getting out of the first half. as with all your stuff, love the title. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i know how ya feel ;_; |
![]() ![]() ![]() your feelings are really specific in this, it makes them stronger, like you know you distrust your father and love your mother and freinds. It's very unmuddled(it's never like that with me) it's a nice poem, a little cliched, but good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I used to be able to relate so i know how you feel. I think this is really it up ~jake |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw thats sad, i like the way you've transferred your feelings into the poem though. I really like the way you've added the 2 questions into the middle, it adds impact to it. Really well written, but then again i dont expect anything less from you ;-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() ouch, i can relate. i know that feeling... i hope things are ok for you. |