Reviews for Dust From Yesterday
Obsidian chapter 1 . 9/29/2004
Dust from yesterday a problem? Wel have no Fear Obsidian is Here!
you 2 can have your very own Obsidian Dust from Yesterday Goggles!
all you have to do is tap to the Wisdoms of Obsidian...
but seriously...
Well done, Rigidy to begin with but
Purpose in dissarray. flowing to sortment in lost confusion only to be lost in acceptance.
i like
Maid Marian chapter 1 . 9/17/2004
Your emotion shows in this one. Actually it shows almost too much... Sometimes when our hearts are hurting, the emotions are too much and words are forced. Some of your lines feel that way. The idea and overall texture of the poem are great - but the lines don't flow as well as "Solitude" does. Meter isn't the most important aspect of writing good poetry though...emotion and heart have more to do with it - and you have both! :-)
Ashes of a Willow chapter 1 . 9/16/2004
i loved the rhyme and the ending was great! keep up the good work!
Midare chapter 1 . 9/16/2004
Wow.. excellent writing. The message conveyed is quite beautiful. The only peice of constructive criticism I can offer is about the rhyming words themselves - sometimes, they seemed a little oversimplistic. But, hey, not everything has to be complicated. ;)