Reviews for Ruatha's Grammar Review
warnthepenguins chapter 2 . 1/10/2005
Your rules are good. I am glad that someone is willing to spell them out. I also get tired of telling people how to do dialogue in my reviews.

But as for your point about dialogue tags...I know that our fourth-grade teachers made a big deal out of using all kinds of 'fun' words instead of "said" (well, I know *mine* did)-like "shouted," or "cursed," or "erupted," or "pontificated." But the more recent consensus, surprisingly, is that 'said' is almost always the right choice. Sure, it's bland. But your tags shouldn't be supporting your dialogue; your dialogue should carry itself. And 'said' is *so* bland that it's /invisible/. 'Said' never brings a reader up short like the more unfortunate 'fancy' tags. Granted, there are exceptions. But really, I've found a steady diet of 'saids,' augmented here and there with dashes of 'asked,' 'yelled,' 'screamed,' 'whispered,' 'replied,' and 'lied,' makes for a perfectly balanced diet. 'Said' is like grammatical fiber-it makes everything flow smoothly.

Also I like the occasional irresistible onomatopoetic tag, such as

"Stop making fun of my sheep form!" Ezera blatted.
The Queen of Squirrels chapter 5 . 1/9/2005
I'm always trying to make my writing better (and I start langauge arts class up again tommorrow) so I figured I'd give this a look over. Back in the day when I had more time, I would leave larger reviews that often dealt with the dreaded to-toos, who's speaking, not everything being a 'he said/ she asked', so a lot of this I was familliar with, but I read it all anyway because I like to know what I'm talking about and no one is perfect. And you did help clear up a dialogue thing for me, for which I'm eternally grateful, but also leads me to another question. Sentence fragments! Starting with And or But was supposedly a big no-no with my 6th grade english teacher( She wasn't nearly as good as yours), yet I've seen it done before and do it myself. I've always thought it's more writing style and personal preference. Are there any major rules concerning it?
Dirty Wallpaper chapter 5 . 12/29/2004
Oi! So i finally get around to reading it, late at night, when i'm half asleep - how logical. This was really good, helpful as always :). Thanks for answering my question, saves me from endeavoring to go and find the answer myself and getting confused. Oh the laziness and stupidity! Anyway, great work, kudos.
Tiuwiu chapter 5 . 12/5/2004
Hiya, first I need to say that I'm very relived to have found your "grammar series" as I'm not the best of the world in grammar (in English anyway, my motherlanguage is fairly easier). I've found it very useful and I hope you will continue it. I know that your main purpose isn't writing to non-english-writers but as it is very useful to any one I would like to suggest you to make a point about using articles and prepositions (okay, they might come quite naturally to you, but assure me, it is not so easy to some one who doesn't even know the concept. [in Finnish you just add letters to end of the word]).

So sorry if this confusing, but as I said, i'm not the best in English. x] Oh yes, I've been wondering if there are any verbs that shouldn't be used in future (will go, will do etc.) ?

Well, that's it for now.

with thanks, Tiuwiu

ps. Did you know that there is 15 different (don't know what) things instead of the prepositions in Finnish ? E.g. house - in house, talo - taloSSA. And of course, you might need to change the word your using: table - on table , pöytä - pöyDäLLE. XD hope this you didn't mind this, but I couldn't resist. XXD
meonlymejustme chapter 5 . 11/19/2004
Thanks for that!

I've never used a dash before in my life, i didn't even know that you could or what they were for. But now... well i still probably won't use them but it's very useful to know that i can.
entityjerry chapter 5 . 11/15/2004
First, I'd like to point out that fictionpress removed your URL. I haven't had the chance to check it out myself, but I'm fairly certain they use a script that filters out any text with non-space characters on both sides of a period. My theory is only supported by the fact that your showed up, while your naked URL did not.
Er, anyway, there are three ways to get around the filter: put spaces before and/or after the periods in your URLs, use a place marker for the periods (such as commas or the word "dot" inside parentheses), or you could refer to a link posted in your profile.
I also wanted to mention that I found your opinion of semicolons highly amusing. One of the English teachers I had during eleventh grade professed a similar opinion of dashes - she found them frivolous, as one can generally get the message across with a comma, a colon, or a semicolon. We probably spent more than our fair share of time arguing about the importance of dashes; I'm pleased to have found someone who somewhat agrees with me.
entityjerry chapter 3 . 11/15/2004
In the example from the nineteenth chapter of Sirach, I ran into a familiar problem (for me). I tend not to consciously pay attention to the specific rules of grammar, trusting my instincts instead, and half of the time I find myself wanting to rephrase the 'he said' statements.
"'That is what I said, yes,' agreed the Kerdon, slowly." Is the difference between the quoted 'he said' statement and, "the Kerdon slowly agreed" also one of personal preference? Too, regarding the difference between, "'With directions?' reproached S'ra,"
and, "'Just you wait and see,' Meneschach sniffed," does the word order from the 'he said' statements change because you wanted variety or for a different reason?
ghenne04 chapter 5 . 11/14/2004
Nice job with this chapter! I hope everyone reads this one, at least, because I see so many errors in grammer when I'm reading. My only comment about this chapter, though, is about the commas in a series. You said that the final comma is optional, and I know many people agree with you. However, I was always taught that in English, it's required, whereas in other languages, you're not supposed to use the final comma. For example, the sentence you wrote first would be correct in English, but the sentence you wrote second (if you translated it), would be correct in a language like Spanish. It might have just been the way I was taught, but I figured I would mention it to you, just as another perspective. Anyway - Very nice job on such a tricky subject! Keep writing and update soon!
Tommy2007 chapter 1 . 11/14/2004
Nice work; well written and interesting to read (compared to most texts based on grammar).
meonlymejustme chapter 3 . 11/10/2004
I have no idea how i found this but, wow I'm so glad i did! Very helpful indeed. I really don't have much of a clue when it comes to gramma rules, I just sort of write down what i think sounds right, using commas whenever i'm stuck, even though i know there can't possibly be that many commas in a sentence. Hm. Oh well, cheers for the advice!
Abd'Ikraam chapter 1 . 10/31/2004
Hm. As a bit of a canon "Nazi" I often cringe at lack of proofreadings, pieces full of 1337$34 or other abominations of the English language, or worst of all a lousy plot and cardboard characters. I think this explanation of grammar is very comprehensive, and hopefully it'll help clear up the large archive of mistakes I see. Of course, I tend to break some rules of English myself... [hangs head]
Loki Mischeif-Maker chapter 4 . 10/12/2004
Normally I review chapter by chapter, but normally I'm reading a story and not an essay, and in this case it's easier to sum some things up here (fortunately, those are two homophones I've yet to see miss used . . . but now that I've said it I will next story I pick up!).

Good points, very good points, especially about the dialogue (MY personal pet peeve is bad dialgue, so I'm glad to see something to refer people to), and the explanations and your suggestions were very good. Homophones . . . frankly they scare me sometimes, but you did a good job making them amusing and clear.

All in all, awesome essay!
Loki Mischeif-Maker chapter 1 . 10/10/2004
Yay! Finally, a good essay helping people edit (probably the worst-done writing thing on fictionpress; I know I have problems with it, too). I can sompletely see where your techniques are coming from, and I agree with many of them (especiallyreading it aloud- no wonder my sisters think I'm crazy).

PS Thanks for reviewing the Malemalum Cult!
Eddie Wright chapter 4 . 9/23/2004
Err... this may sound a bit stupid but... I don't know how you use semi colons. I've never been told. Please could you explain it?
Eddie Wright chapter 2 . 9/22/2004
Oh yeah, just thought I'd also add...
I do appreciate your long reviews. I've already gone and sorted out the mistakes I could (I'm sorry, but the werewolves will have to be lived with).
Erm... If it's not to much to ask, I'd really like you to read the other chapters and say what you think of those.
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