Reviews for The Downfall
shea's surrender chapter 1 . 9/19/2004
This one is really good as well. I'd watch for word repitition in the first few lines, but otherwise i didn't notice any problems. I think you flip-flopped a little on this one, your normal ending with a bang turned out as a beginning with a bang, which was nice.
Cloud Burst chapter 1 . 9/19/2004
very beautiful and vivid, well done!