This wasn't your best poem, but I'm sure you already knew that. Did you run fast when they monkeys came after you? Hm, suggestions. In poetry, writing in general, you can make things colorful, meaning, basicly give your writing a style and define your poem by the way you word it. Things don't have to be technical, instead of ringing, you could put singing, or something. I don't know, just giving some ideas if you care to try them. I'm really bored actually and yeah, la de da.