Very nice chapter.

Sure, men are better at everything than women are. Right, dream on.

Cool mudfight.

I enjoyed the interplay of the characters.

Yeah, Jade could use more practice. *_*

Wow! I like this chapter more than the previous one even though that one was great too.

You pulled off Talia's revival so well in here. And the bonus is the romance, and more mysteries.

Keep up the good work! *_*

Whoa, nice cliffhanger! :) I am liking this story.

And I like the prologue even more now that I know what it was. :P

As for critiquing, for the thoughts and telepathic speaking, maybe italicise'em? I find that it makes them more clearer.

Anyway, good job!

Wow, I'm intrigued! That was a great first chapter.

That last bit at the end especially caught my attention, about Earth and that no one lives there anymore. Also, the imagery you used throughout this prologue was great. :)

I'm out of time, so I hope to read more tomorrow.

I think it takes a strong writer to kill off her/his characters. And it is necessary to move the plot forward, and to make other characters do what must be done.

Good Job on this chapter. Cheers. *_*

THis arrival was interesting. I wonder who the Egret are and why they attacked.

Good Job! *_*

That was an excellent chapter, short but with lot's of substance.

Keep up the good work! *_*

The conflict about who goes to earth in this chapter is good. I also like that your characters aren't perfect, that way readers can identify with them.

"What, and I am?" Jade said didbelievingly.

"Actually, yes," said... should be separate paragraphs.

Writer's block aside, this is a good chapter. *_*

Hm, looks like Jade is pissed off majorly. She is quite intimidating, a little hellcat as it seems.

Good chapter, if a short one.

Keep writing! *_*

P.S. thans for the review of "Eternity" It is the theme song in "Virus Conspiracy" I did mean "god-speckled", but I can see how it could be misconstrued. The entire theme song is intended as a clue in that novel, and it will be revealed in later chapters why.

Another exciting chapter. Christopher has spunk. I also like the background info you weaved into this chapter.

Good Job! *_*

"Orion", don't I love that name, hehe.

Mental transmutation, cool stuff you have here.

Very interesting chapter. Christopher must be special even among the talented.

Good job! *_*

That was very well done. I like the concept you're exploring here. Good imagery.

Great Job! *_*

I like the beginning and this looks like an excellent beginning to a story. I plan to read the rest as soon as I can.

definitely good! i like how you finally resolve everything-her past, the change, etc.-at the end...and yet leave enough possibilities open for an equally interesting sequel. good work! it's always hard for me to finish my stories, so i know that completing this one was quite an accomplishment. congratulations! and don't stop writing!

Aw. I'm sad now it's over it was really a great story! I'm glad you're writing a sequel can wait for the next one!