Reviews for Here I Walk
Armas Apple chapter 1 . 12/27/2004
That is so pretty in a depressful little way... I really like your poems, and I really hope you write more! _
Ashes of a Willow chapter 1 . 9/24/2004
Great job! I liked the repitition of certain lines! The one line that I feel doesn't fit is the last line, "the children do not sing". I think the poem is fine w/o it, because you don't really go into depth about children throughout the poem. i'm not trying to change your poem, (it's great the way it is), but that's just one thing that seemed out of place and kind of came out of nowhere. *wonderful job describing the feelings of war and the descriptions were great! keep up the good work
Kris 56 chapter 1 . 9/24/2004
Oh my god...this is such a beautiful piece of poetry...I agree with it entirely...I love it a lot! It's amazingly beautiful! (And yet still tragic)
The way the words flow, the usage of each word in a correct's really a wonderous piece of poetry. I really like it a lot...
I hope you write more!