Reviews for Puzzle of June the Fifth |
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![]() ![]() i definately think this could be expanded on, but for now it works. do you plan on adding to this chapter? anyway, nice work an' all, just keep it up! |
![]() ![]() short, but good so far. was the use of 'my' in the first line intentional? 'cause if it is, who are you? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Consider this a review for a review. This is very good, I love your clipped style. It's just your very first line has a first person 'my' in it, I don't know whether that's intentional - but the rest of it is in third person, so I'm kind of wondering about that. Other than that, thumbs up! Can't wait for more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() it's short but certainly got me hooked. keep writing! (not so good at writing reviews) |
![]() ![]() ![]() very short. Interesting, but short. It would be interesting to know if your 'homocide report' follows the actually format of a real report. |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha i 'm in your profile! thank you friend! nice story...update or i shall murder you in your sleep! bwahahaha! |
![]() ![]() ![]() great writing, friend! it's interesting, and keeps the reader... reading! |
![]() ![]() c'est tres bien, mon ami! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Get more chapters posted! I liked it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the way this is written. Very short and simple sentences describing the case, yet paragraphs without any choppiness or interruptions. Good work! . EvilNeko13 P.S. I thought a good title might be "June the Fifth, 2004" or maybe drop the 2004. I don't know. Just a suggestion. lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, this is good! I can't wait until the next chapter! Hmm...How about...'Pieces and Puzzles'? Sounds corny, yes. But I thought it would fit...You don't have to |