Very cool beginning!

Cool! Lovin' it. It made me laugh. I think i will like 'Vaan'. You have a very odd way of looking at the world, even if it is through (thru!) someone else's 'eyes'. Anyways, I am soo looking forward to the next chap!

I like Vaan. I like him a lot. Probably because he reminds me of myself in the way he's brutally honest, aware of it, cool with it, and thinks everyone else should just get the hell over it. In fact, the more I saw, the more I was thought, "Haha, it's like someone else is reading my mind and putting it down on paper. HOW CRAZY." Which is really cool, because it's amazing for a reader to connect that well with a character in the first chapter. Christ. THE FIRST CHAPTER. That's ... well. Like I said, amazing. Moving on. "Metaphors, man." Why do random lines make me laugh so insanely hard? You're a nutbar, Alyn. Drasil. Alyn Drasil. Thingy. (It's really obvious when I don't know what to call someone. Crap.) Anyway. I'm torn between harassing you to update Christian Faith and harassing you to update this, so I'll settle for both. *harasses endlessly* UPDATE YOU CRAZY CRAZY FOOL! AND FEAR MY LACK OF PUNCTUATION WHILE YOU'RE AT IT! (On a side note, I'm in a strange mood and I hope you'll forgive me just this one time for typing a disjointed, crappy review. Thanks. And by the way, did I mention that you should update? Because you should.)

I like Vaan, he reminds me of my sister, lol. I love how you describe his personality, especially with all the... colorful words, lol. I can't wait to see how he deals with the counseler person -evil grin-
Omg, when I figure out your the same writer who made up Christian and Jessie, I was like, 0_0! No way! But that just says your a really good writer, heh.
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