|Reviews for If only or Different|
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 2/28/2006
If only heart and soul could talk as one,
If only all that's dreamed was life's real truth,
If only rainbows came when despair struck,
If only life weren't the end of life,
¿What things could one soul tell another soul?
Of moonbeams which Hope rides to reach through night,
Of star songs twinkling softly melodies,
Of brown cinnamon kiss and heart's delight,
And, orchids white blooming in winter mists;
¿What tales one heart could tell another heart?
Of patience and devotion eternal,
Of silences filled with another's joy,
And, glory to be close at hand again;
If only sun did not evaporate,
Early morn's clouds filled with bright orange dyes;
And, if only my heart was strong enough,
To have breath to tell Thee dear what love means,—
Then moonbeams would not fade when morning came,
Or heart stop beating when your presence left,
And, all Hope's dreams that dreamed of dreams unsaid,—
Would be fulfilled with Thee wrapped in my arms.
p.s. I really like this poem. It captures so much of how complicated feelings and words are. m
| kerbieflaw chapter 1 . 10/12/2004
the questions in the poem came flooding over... perhaps not so good in the sense that it might overwhelm the reader too much, but it does add more to the sense of losing control and all that. the last line was good, but remember not to use too many questions next time, especially if it affects the mood of the poem. ;) overall, nicely done, so keep it up!
| ApplesCM chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
I like this poem. I can realte well to it. Thanks for reviewing my poems. I should go back and fix those spelling/grammer errors. Oops. :-) Nice job!
| Cry Tears of Darkness chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
i like that last line on its own. amazingness!
| angelsstar chapter 1 . 10/7/2004
I like how you repeatsome words in a stanza and I really like the last stanza