Wow great chapter, nice to see an extension of length, and the extra info at the end was a great help. Look forward to the fight... Nice work! ~ Luke

Okay why is it i can actually hear like drums going off in my head for this chapter? Maybe you wrote it in such a way that we all want to stand and fight with Azuren? Is it that your imagery and emotion that you put here is enough to get us ready to attack the no good SOB for causing too much pain to Azuren?

It problem is all those things stated and the fact that the pace of your story is fast so finishing a chapter is so easy.

Great job buddy.

Momo

Okay so you did a good job with getting the kid a kick in the head of what lies before him as in his destiny. Good job. I like the dialogue in this too. You did a good job of working on his emotions even though it was almost too melodramatic with how he was re-thinking his past life tribulations you did not go overboard so kuddos for having a good balance.

Interesting as always and I will be getting to more. I don't plan to get to the Grail until I finish this one. You know how many chapters this has? So sorry but I need to stick to one story at a time for you.

Momo

Nice chapter, although it was dialogue, I believe it was well executed. The opening line made me laugh for some reason... I suppose Azuren's innocent naivety sometimes shines through his usual persona. It was nice to see some stuff about Thelanor - it succeeded in fleshing out his character. All in all, good work ~ Luke

Nice chapter, always good to see the discovery of new things, and plot progression at the same time. Azuren's training I'm really enjoying, and the ending with the spirit! Can't wait for the next one. ~ Luke

A little predictable with the jailer freeing him, but otherwise this was another great chapter. It seems that in this world "bad luck" or "cursed" things are common...and the recipients are the only ones who know it's idiotic to believe that. One thing: it's always the foil for the bad guy if they tell the hero their plans. lol, Ranor. I'm going to bet you Azuren will figure out a way to bite him back for what he did to everyone. XD

Whoa, very suspenseful chapter! Poor Julia! Stupid people...

And now Azuren has his... power... and stuff. He'll not die, right? RIGHT? D:

Probably a little too plain dialogue heavy at the beginning, but good explanations of magic! ~ Luke

Cripes, I knew it wasn't a 'curse' but I didn't think it was flat out murder! At least the little girl, julia, is being nice to him. :D Once again, I feel that some of this moving too fast... or at least the "narrating"... like there's not enough time to get to know how everything is happening? Something like that, I'm no good at explaining. That's my only complaint (except for my grammar nazi self :P).

I feel that the objection scene went by too quickly to get the most of it but this is really good. Love the concept of a baby being abandoned because of his 'demon eyes' and this becoming a term for prejudice. (Not the concept really, the idea... I dun like prejudice. xP)

Poor Azuren...

Aww, the training continues, and what a lovely warm ending - made me feel all fuzzy inside hehe. Great work as usual, thoroughly enjoying the story, and watching Azuren's adventures. nice work ~ Luke

I'm enjoying Azuren's training, he's really grown on me as a character and he is developing fast. I like how the A/N at the end addressed some issues such as the wolf thing. Nice work! ~ Luke

Hm...This was really good here. Fighting scenes good as always and well I won't pick about anything since nothing really stopped my flow and interrupted the story for me.

Great job with your scenery descriptions though and I also love how you brought the beginning into the story to keep everything connected and relevant. For a moment there I thought you were about to do a flashback scene when you went back to Azuren so watch out for that okay.

You're still cooking with awesome sauce in my opinion so keep it up.

Momo

Okay so I have to say that this is moving along fine. I like how you brought in the other elves, but it has a modern language to it that takes away from the fantasy feel.

As creative as you are you need to start making up your own elven language. Don't laugh I'm serious. That was something I was going to do in a story and I think it would be very neat here. If you would like me to go into more detail send me a PM.

Anyway, I like Eldan, but the switching from the spot they found him then to the village was sudden. YOu did not transition well there so look out, and the way the girls flocked was forced. I know you could have eased them in a little better only because it was like BAM then there were babes. LOL'D come on Mr. Badguy... Some tweaking there would do just fine, but on to the next. The dialogue when Azuren first met Enriel was unnecessary when he said "Are you Eldan's father?"

Eldan said he was so it seemed strange that Azuren would ask so maybe you were looking for something different to say there.

Okay the history within was cool, but again you have very modern language with forest elves living in the trees...Work on that okay, even though you got 40 chappies.

This is still very cool as always and your details are excellently portrayed. I am swamped, I don't mind saying so you won't get a bunch of reviews in a row, but you know I won't leave you hanging just for the heck of it.

Oh and congrats on your review count. I looked at when you started though and it was a sort of buzz kill but then again there are some piece here that have been posted for just as long with like 5 so I know you are stoked about it.

Take care and catch up with this as I work at the bar.

Momo ( You are paid in full for me until chapter 14 so it is no need for me to repeat myself.)

Okay this is very good. I've got to tell you that you are switching tenses a lot. Watch out for that. Oh and the villagers missing him, was his father's hunters just trying to be nice or they felt like the elves could just get him?

The flow is good, still a little fast but not as fast as the last chapter so better with the pacing here. I wonder how the elves will take to him and its curious how the wolves did not alert him of the elves or is there something up with that? Guess I have to read and find out hunh?

Good job!

Momo