Oh wow, this is interesting! I wonder who'll win this time! You sure do like to put a lot of action scenes in your stories - reminds me of myself when I was younger! I just went over my drafts that I wrote when I was around 11~13 and I was like... oh~ to many fighting scenes :X

But great chapter all the same!

Narq.

Well, I actually found this dialogue quite interesting, and I loved the way you jested about Ellis. Poor Ellis though :P

Great job (oops, i'm back to short reviews~)

Narq.

Oh well, sorry for being away for such a long time. School is taking up all my time and I only go on the computer in the weekends. But anyways, on to the story, I loved how you have so much planned out, down to the different types of wolves - it's plain to see you've put a lot into this story. You like duels and fighting scenes a lot, and your good at it no doubt but take care not to get the fighting too long or too often or else the reader gets a bit tired of it (taking in mind that the reader may not like fighting scenes as much as you do)

Good chapter!

Narq.

Azuren's dream kind of funny.. i dunno why. Anyways, I liked the bit in italics... it intruged me.

Great work!

Oh wow! the whole thing's a bet! And someone cursed a lot, didn't he? Anyways, great work and thanks for reviewing my stories~ (lol, i sound like you now!)

I liked this chapter. it was cool seeing him interact with the mentor and learning, and I like how they explained what it was to him and everything.

Hello once again!

It has been a long, long time since my last review, hasn't it? Sorry bout that.

Hmm. I have to say, for a first attempt at a serious fight scene, you did pretty well! (My first fight scene tho... err, lets not go there). Anyway, once again, you end the chapter with an insane cliffie. Thankfully, the other chapters are up _

I'll try to review again tomorrow.

Sorry for the delay!

Lyn-san

This is a really interesting chapter~ I like the way you write!

Narq.

I got the connection on the ending with the childen, but the phrasing seems a bit off. Of course, we always say that someone's ears are burning when he is talked about. I think the same can be said of a sneeze.

The pinning the tail on Roary is funny, but it seems a bit corny as well. The children do need to do something to make fun of Fenris, but I am on a mind blank right now and can't come up with anything. That's why there's not been a new chapter of Klabautermann of late.

The fighting between Eldan and Fenris with Lyren in the middle reminds me of Johann and Alteng with William in the middle to keep the bloodshed from happening. That is William's special purpose.

This seemed to be a chapter full of pranks, and it is sad that Azuren doesn't share the crush for Lynn. She did seem to stand out from the others. It is good to see Azuren finding a reason to keep alive and not needlessly throw his life away.

Whew! Finally made it through this story. Now, you are going to have to update. This chapter might be a filler, but it does move the characters forward.

I never thought that Azuren was a Mary Sue. He is still fallible. That does not make a character unlikeable because of that.

I also don't believe in Mary Sues, because you can look at popular animes of late like Death Note and COde Geas, where the heroes are power mad. How can you still believe in what Lelouch is doing is right, when he kills Euphemia, who was looking for a peaceful solution to the same problem.

Still, I like Azuren, because he makes mistakes. It makes him more human. Yes, he needed to be smacked around by Thelanor. It was stupid of him to rush into this situation.

As for this chapter, outside Azuren getting a scolding from Thelanor, the rest of what the past hero says doesn't make much sense to me or really sense in telling Azuren right now.

hmm...I had mixed feelings about this one. Yeah, okay, with the good stuff first; tHe fight was a good wrapp up, and eLdan showed a pretty cool skill with the arrow, wow, wonder how many Elves do that in stories on here...whatever, it was still cool!

Okay, I just wanted to know if the wind that shielded him and healed him was the same. Oh, I kinda thought this was a good time for djinn to do some cool fighting, that let me down, but I was soon brought back up when he controlled Azuren a little in the fight like a puppet! And what did you mean by Azuren's awakening? Did he recieve something from his past self or something? Oh,and I thought the bad dude of these last chapters was like a demon or something? So his mate was one to, right? So, he was a good monsters thing back then, then turned evil?

Pretty good fight so far, especially the chapter beforehand with the oraks(did I spell that right?) trying to rip his body to shreds. The fight scenes in here are pretty good to, but I kinda wonder about the spirit which is supposedly within his blade. A spiritual weapon is made when someone sacrifices themself in its making, right? Wonder who it was!

*Cough* Yeah, so, I liked the info giving by djinn, and I wonder if he's going to take a bigger part in this fight, even though his commentary did shed light onto certain objects. tHe only thing I didn't like is hwne all his injuries were healed...though the barrier of wind was cool

~SD

p.S, Lynn should be something cool, eventually!

Okay, my head is getting goofy, and I think I will hang it up for the night.

So, the darkenkin were human at one time? I just thought that they were created, but this does give some motivation for this opponent. Of course, given his motivations, doesn'tit make him just as hypocritical to want to rape Lynn. It is one thing to kill all the hypocrites, but it is another to torture them before hand.

It is good to see that Azuren can reach a limit and pass out. And the darkenkin certainly has given him something else to chew on.

Okay the vcr didn't record my shows. The prgramming got erased. It sucks!

Oh well, this means I read another chapter. This is another action packed chapter, and the extensive fighting is proper because this seems to be a dealy foe. I would have been really surprised if the darkenkin had no type of poison on its claws. I would have thought it would be a more devastating type of poison, where the person would never fully recover from it.

Okay, I am waiting for the Darkenkin to exclaim that famous line of "That's impossible!"

Well, unlike your other fight scenes, this one seems to have some true merit to it in that it is a worthy foe and a life struggle. I liked that Azuren was afraid for a bit when the oraks were ressurrected, then he had to think on his teaching. That was an effective flashback scene.

As for the fighting the darkenkin, I understand. My characters tend to do their own things as well. I think it is a sign of good writing.

I want to get to my video tape from last week's anime watching . . . I had to work Saturday again. So, I will leave off the last four chapters for now. Hopefully, I will get back to it tomorrow night.