Great chapter! xD and so Azuren's quest begins o.O well... his first one... Poor Ilgen though.. such a sick execution -.-' Ranor too, sick, sick man. -.- Anyway, great chapter! Only thing I noticed was at the end, where a mysterious man was speaking - it was sort of hard to tell who was who. I got a little confused, but aside from that, great work xD

~FoxyWriter

Great chapter _ not much to say - a few past/present tenses out of place, but other than that, -thumbs up- _ I'll read some more later :D 28 more chapters and I'll be caught up wee _

~FoxyWriter

o.o wow! *reads more* xD I'm in a reading mood wee xD Great chapter! :D

~FoxyWriter

Great chapter ! O.O getting really interesting now xD great insight on the elven culture and how they came to be o.o and of Azuren's heritage - he must be an Edenish xD

~FoxyWriter

Ouch! Hm, seems like you're fond of tragedies. Poor Julia! i'm starting to like her. And poorer Azuren! Why should he be the one to suffer everything!

*but on the other side, I like him, his looks, he's yummy in my imagination*

*winks!*

gotta go! I'll try to drop by asap.

I looked back and reread the first chapter, both your writing and Azuren's knowledge is very differnt. Different meaning better! I'm also glad that u didn't end this last chapter with a cliff hanger ;)

Another short one but this is so sad, and tragic. Poor Azuren! To be blamed for his parents' death when in truth is that the death has been planned!

I feel so sorry for him, but I'm also happy that there's Julia.

I like the mood you put into this chapter for some reason it gives me kind of a morose feeling

Didn't expect for the story to go this way. This keeps things fresh methinks. A good and short chapter.

Another great chapter :D The paragraphs could be split, I think - it'll make it bigger, but that's really it, aside from a couple tense-errors. Nothing big though - I love the descriptive scene with the wolves _ Great work :D

~FoxyWriter

This is short compared to the first ones but the drama is still there. And I felt it. It's nice that you're able to incorporate drama in such a short piece.

Poor Azuren!

o I like this chapter O.O I'm tempted to read more, but I have too much to do now Wonderful story so far, can't wait to read on ! :D Great work _

~FoxyWriter

This story is getting more and more interesting with every chapter I read :)

I like your writing style especialy in this chapter It is written a lot like the book Eragon [I recomend you read it]. It's probably just me though

Well, this time around the paste seemed well placed. Still slightly rushed, but seems to me you're slowing down. Still it's hard to tell what the story will be about, but it's moving along nicely. Good job.

Well, it still seems overly rushed. I do however acknowledge when you end your chapters: Azuren/Thelanor's choldhood being told in just one chappie. I'd advice that you simply extend the chapter length a bit and don't just jump from one event to the other, giving each such a small share of time. The way you're doing it seems slightly random and although I'm fully aware of the flow of the story, it seems like it could use a bit more attention.

The story itself, so far, has an interesting plot that sucks the reader in, yet the way it's told gives slightly the impression of a two friends talk: "Hey, you know, yesterday I..." if you know what I mean.