Aww... I thought there was romance between the suit and Alora...

I love this update soon!

Good story!

I'm not sure if I like Alora's passivity, but good job in keeping her character consistent. (On a completely random side note, maybe Drake was trying to tell her that with his "You need to sharpen your knives once in awhile" comment. You probably didn't mean for the double meaning, but I'm going to interpret it that way regardless.)

Watch out for typos! The most common one I saw was "form" instead of "from". I've listed the ones I spotted so that when you eventually get around to editing to story, you're job will be a little easier.(Chapter Nine,"Oh yeah… you work." Alora laughed a bit. I’m on break form classes.") (Chapter Nine, "Quickly, Alora unfolded the paper. She knew it was form the suit, which only increased her curiosity.")(Chapter Ten, ""My Christmas was… routine, I suppose you’d say. Just not the routine you described. I flew back form Japan on Christmas Eve.") (Chapter Thirteen, "With continued help form Drake, Alora managed to pass her algebra class with a B-something she had never thought possible.")(Chapter Thirteen, "A movie scene flashed before her eyes. "I feel like that girl form Pretty Woman…" She muttered with a sigh.") (Chapter Thirteen, "Nancy pulled out a laptop form the corner with the drape and typed for a moment; clicking quickly.")

I don't know if you're planning on delving into it or not, but I would like to know more about Alora's past. For example, Molly and Alora's past friendship, how Alora became interested in pottery, and how Kendra and Alora became such close friends when they seem extremely dissimilar. I'm glad, though, that you've refrained from divulging too much about Drake. It keeps him intriguing.)

Hmm, I like that you include tidbits about pottery, like the explanation for determining the quality of a piece; it adds to Alora's credibility as the artist she so vehemently declares she is.

Oh, and I love the Pretty Woman parallelism.

Actually, now that I think about it, you have a relatively sprawling plotline. There's Alora's art, her roommates, her college and money troubles, her sister and her mother's snobbishness, her parents' marriage woes, her brother's preoccupations, Drake's friendship, and Xander's love. Of course, complication is necessary for any story, but because yours seems more disconnected (which is not a bad thing, mind you) than most, be careful not to let any part of it lie fallow for too long.

And, okay, to finish up with the praise: Great story, strong characters, marvelous interaction, and well-defined relationships. I love that you haven't given in to the Xander-Alora-Drake triangle that seems imminent. I mean, potentially it would be fine to start that drama, but right now, Drake and Alora's relationship is solid as is.

Anyway, that's my two cents. Sorry if I overstepped, but everything I say I hope will be of some constructive use.

Please keep writing!

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love it keep them comeing,..

That explains the accent he had in the beginning. It was Nordic...

Geebus, why do I feel like her parents are on the verge of divorce? I mean seriously, you know? Another strange thing I've been thinking constantly: As to when Drake was born, I find myself wondering if he's a Virgo? (No virgin jokes, especially since I'm almost positive he was raped as a teenager. O_O) By that, I mean he seems like the type of guy who takes care of himself-hence the neat apartment. He seems to like things to be precise and exact. He needs to be sure on things... that's why I wonder if he's a virgo. n_n;

Aw, poor Matt :( He seems cool and he's a year younger than me! HaHa. The baby! I wish I could sympathize with Alora, but I wasn't ignored much... and I'm a middle child.

But I know all about parents' fighting like that... Damn, it takes a LOT of LOUD music to drown it out. Hopefully things will work out for the Mooney family though?

Aw... Drake... *longs to hug* He seemed exceptionally hurt... abandoned by a friend for her boyfriend. At the same time, I can't help but feel like his feelings for her are on a level slightly above the feelings one might feel for a friend... highly above, actually. Can't wait to see the sex scene between these two, to tell the truth. I already have these hilarious visions in mind where he tries to plan it down to minute detail, and she's like "What the hell do you think you're doing?"

FINALLY, signed in so I can properly review! I can't wait to see the end of this... so he's half and half, eh? Oh, Norwegian... I wonder if Alora will try to learn any in order to annoy the crap out of him. The way things seem to go, she could mispronounce it, and he'd be annoyed as to correct her pronunciations. XD

You know, I wonder if he's in Advertising.. wouldn't that be great? Drake Fearborn associating with rich artists on a daily basis? XD

This is a really cute. I like that it is slow yet still seeming to go at a steady pace. Well done.

I liked the story so far. You are pretty good with the descriptions. I will continue reading.

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hey. awesome story so far. i really love the characters and the storyline so far.i cant wait for more so please update soon!latersGA

I feel for Alora, I really do! Being made to get her measurements and wearing awkard shoes and an awkward skirt... The por girl! Although, I do like Drake. He could tutor me anyday ;) HaHa!

Also, I picked up some minor mistakes along the way. If you want, I can send you an e-mail about them. It'd be easier than going back and copying everything into a review.

Can't wait for your next chapter Sis! I hope Xander shows up again!