I'm curious... Is there going to be romance between the suit and the artist? Because if there is, I'm excied :D

i have to admit i dont particularly trust xander, but he does sound absolutely gorgeous.

Love the story! It's got a great 'feel good' atmosphere about it, hard to explain, but it makes me smile! I love Alora, and i like the nickname Drake's given her - Nutmeg's a cool name! Anyway, just wanted to say, great story, and update soon!Bye! *waves*

Really enjoying this story, it's very easy to imagine the scenes playing out as you read. Anxiously waiting for the update.

Hey! You're back, and I'm hungry. Waiting for dinner! bleah. Anyway, I like Alora's dad. Don't quite understand how he came to marry someone quite like Alora's mum though. They seem like they're from two different worlds (which, I believe, they are). Maybe when you're younger, such differences don't seem to be quite so obvious. I don't like Xander already. Probably because I prefer the slightly shyer type of guy, haha p urgh, wonder how that plot line is going to turn out. If he's say, a drug dealer or involved in any other shady business, I hope Alora is smart enough to stay away! I don't know if I've said this before, but this chapter has further emphasized it. What's the suit's background? We don't know anything about him, besides the fact that he's a suit. Never met any of his friends (does he have any?), colleagues, family. Maybe he's just a super loner? Or disowned? Or an only child who's parents have died? I really do want to know. And, is he so tired because there's been an extra amount of work lately? Or does the festive cheer really get to him, because he doesn't have anyone to celebrate with? haha, pleaseplease udpate! (: and, school is rough? Totally get you.

hey there :) I'm a newcomer to your story and just would like to say that I love it so far! Since I started reading the other day, I've been hooked and I didn't get a chance to review it until now lol. I really like the suit but I bet the date with Xander won't go as well as she wanted it to lol. Anyway, please post anoter chapter soon because I'll start review each one now. Great story so far!

hey kelly! thanks for updating [and letting me know!]. they brighten my joe is soo delightful! i would give him a would it be too early to decide that xander is an ass? yes. he's definately not a favorite character. where will things go from here?write more soon, kiddo!

ooh xander...

Wow...some strong characters here. I love the way Drake has a lot more personality to him than meets the eye. He and Alora compliment each other nicely-he's a rich man in a lucrative career, she's the artist who does what she loves but suffers financially because of it, yet they both are lonely. Great plot line as well.

I'm on DA too, my user name is bohemefugue.

Great chapter! I like the sound of this new guy, Xander..he sounds hott! I can't wait til the next chapter.

that wa god..thanks a lot for updating it makes for a very nice Christmas present (and it's snowing this morning so I'm in a very good mood). Though the thought of Drake being alone for Christmas is a bit depressing..I kept expecting him to appear at Alora's..but well, it wasn't meant to what about that Xander guy?AArgh, he seems insanely arrogant (hope I'm mistaken about him) and with Drake depressed..whatever!Good luck and thanks again for updatinglou

Like, wtf girl, why didn't anyone die? Ahahaha... I know, I know, I'm an idiot but you love me anyway.

Xander... he reminds me of someone. I'm sure yu can probably guess who I'm referring to though. I feel bad for Drake... Alora's going to dump him for Xander... :(

I think the member of Alora's family I like the msot is Grandpa Joe because he acts like a kid in a candy store and he shares the name of my great-grandfather! Yeah, I'm slightly biased O.o Meh, oh well. My Christmas went like that sorta... just no fancy parties. And Christmas Eve and Dayw ere spent with my dad's family O.o I can't wait to find out what happens between Drake, Alora, and Xander! I bet that's why Drake was so not himself, he's jealous! I know, I'm probably wrong... but I like to guess?

Very nice beginning. I like the special attention you pay to details of description.

"...[a white-haired couple,..." Inside the brackets are suggestion.

"She'd have about a [hundred dollar]..."

Alore is a well developed character.

I like the conflict right off. Good hook. *_*

you reviewed me, I now return the favor. Sorry it's so late and I will try to return and read the rest at a different time.

Numbers like 19 (anything under 100) should be written out: nineteen. Also $100 should probably be written out as 100 dollars. "tall, dark, and handsome". should have the period inside of the quotes. "...handsome."

The suit’s voice eased into Alora’s hearing. - interesting way of phrasing it. not good or bad, just interesting. I did like how you called him the suits. but I wonder that since it is being used as a name if it should be in caps? Not sure...I think thats a stylistic thing.

? is not a punct mark. As much as it sucks you gotta pick one or the other.

Okay that was a lot of CC and thats surprising only because this was well done, especially for a ficpress story. Your details were great, especially at the start. The dialogue seemed basically natural, just be careful not to go overboard with the !. Other than that this was very well done. Kudos

Mack

Hey, there. Thank you so much for the review, Mack and I really appreciate you taking the time to read our story.

Anyway, on to the review! I haven't read any of your reviews yet, so if I repeat anything that has already been mentioned, feel free to ignore it if you wish.

I think this was a very nicely done first chapter. I like the descriptions that you have in the opening paragraphs. I also like the name Alora. Very pretty.

As a general rule, any number under 100 should be written out. Five feet, two inches instead of 5'2.

I'm really kind of liking Alora so far. I'd like to get to know her a little bit more, which I'm guessing I'll no doubt get to in future chapters.

Again, as another general rule, only one punctuation mark is needed at the end of a sentence or dialogue. A ? is preferable, then add a tag on at the end describing it. For example: instead of "What are you doing!" try "What are you doing?" she demanded.

And that's about it. I think this story could go far with a little work.

~Ty

P.S. If you're still looking for a Beta, I'll be happy to try and help you best as I can. If you've already found one, go ahead and ignore me. Everyone else does, lol.