Reviews for Nutmeg aka Coffee Shop Story |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ok. I loved Chapter 2. It was HILARIOUS! This story is great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Chapter 1 is very, very good. There is one problem: Kendra and Alora are not described very much. |
![]() ![]() Kool story! Im already interested can't wait for thenext chapter! |
![]() ![]() I realize that Alora is the center of this piece, but I do believe that Kendra has a larger role to play then that of the confidant and I hope to see that explored later on. I believe that the amount of description that you use walks a delicate line between just-enough and too-little, but it has walked that line well so far. Hope to see more of that. And her fascination with "suits," I find myself wondering if that springs from something in her past or if it is just a hatred/attraction that has developed in her. If the latter, then I feel that there needs to be some explanation as to what attracted her to this type of person. But, then again, I would caution you to be careful about telling the whole story. Purposefully leave things a little ambiguose would be my advice. I believe that a little ambiguioty can leave readers wanting more, even if you never answer the question. Interesting read overall, hope to see more soon. |
![]() ![]() This chapter was great.. I'm starting to think that Alora and the "Suit" are both rude people.. I'm curious to see if they will eventually get along. MORE CHAPTERS! MORE! |
![]() ![]() I liked this chapter alot.. I could really visual the characters in the story, especially the "suit". I'm interested to see how this will play out! |
![]() ![]() ![]() (Covers chapters one and two) I liked the vivid descriptions, and the attention to detail. I also enjoyed what looks like a little bit of foreshadowing in chapter 1. It’s cool to see you’ve taken something at that first glance doesn’t sound too exciting, and made it quite interesting. Guess I’ll have to wait for some more of the story to see what happens *hint, hint*. I’m not sure what all this stuff about nutmeg is about (guess it must be pretty good), I’m more of a tea drinker myself. I like the suit, I don’t think he’s so bad. |
![]() ![]() I'm going to do you a favor by reviewing this chapter now. So don't yell at me because I didn't do it sooner. Anyway, I enjoyed the interaction b/t Alora& suit guy, and the chapter. Sorry it me so long to review the 1st and thanks for the nice comment, I feel loved now. You know there are two other people you could get to review your story(hint, hint)! Update soon, I know you have them! LMD PS: What fun are planning with nutmeg? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! I think I'm the first reviewer for this chapter? heh. I'm adding on to your reviewer count! It means you'll update faster... right? ) I like the Suit actually. Can't wait for more. ) |
![]() ![]() This is review number five, and I know I should have done this last night. Loving the story so far, but I'm sure you already know that. Now that I have done my part, it your turn to do yours! Please update soon! LMD PS: LOL nutmeg |
![]() ![]() ![]() We, it's about time you get this up and about time I review to it! I love being priveleged enough to read your work afore it goes up! ANYWAY! If the suit turns out like Fluffy, I will laugh XD and Kaya always makes me think of Kayla. Don't ask, my mind is warped. Blame my twin! You should send me the updates before hand becuase I'm special and I wanna read MORE! Do you hear? MORE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol - this is great! I have two sections of my review (hehehe) the story, and the coffee. Work at Starbucks, much? Wuss! 140 degrees? I scoff. Normal is 160 *mutter mutter mutter.* i'm sure this wasn't meant to be funny, but it cracked me up. I love finding people who know just as many random coffee facts. (Lol - I don't even LIKE coffee, and I work at Starbucks.) Anyway, I really liked the coffee part cause I totally could relate to all of it. And after that ranting - I like the plot of two opposites running into each other over and over again. The suit does douns like a jerk. _ I hope he isn't THAT old, but whatever. Update quickly! ~Tessandra |
![]() ![]() ![]() this looks like its going to be a really intersting story. i cant wait to read some more of it. oh, and fore the fact that my computer went through its funerary rights last week, a big thank you for all the comments you've left me. keep up the writing, it looks wonderful. |
![]() ![]() lol. i love it! "long, slender fingers, but sinewy, large hands. Perfect hands for a potter." -that made me smile. oh how i miss ceramics. the descriptions are so freaking amazing. you take note on the teniest things and that makes it so good and real. this is another brilliant story in the making. you have to update very very soon, kelly-b. and let me know when you do. |